Reviewer: Alpha Signed [Report This]
Date: July 11 2023 2:52 AM Title: Chapter 7 - Benjamin

Again, very well written chapter. There is a lot of depth to work through in this story that makes the reader stay engaged.

I am pleased that you are giving us an insight if not just a glimpse into the life of Jinshin. I am also pleasantly surprised to see her stern but somewhat respectful attitude toward Ben, although she is not a pushover but will not harm him unnecessarily.

There were multiple teasers through other chapters as to what her personality would be although those were in social situations. Her interactions with others seemed to be more calming in nature. As we know there are those individuals in life that may come across as calm and respectful in social situations but in private, they are evil straight to the core of their being. I am happy to see she doesn't disappoint and is calm although firm with Ben. 

Jinshin comes across as a realist and I like how she set the ground rules at the start. It is nice to have a character that is somewhat amiable toward their victim.

Life threw Ben a Soup Sandwich, and he deserves to be angry, but I'm rooting for him to be the smart guy Jinshin thinks he is and take this as an opportunity to make this horrible situation he was thrust into and make the best of it. I really would like to see him create a relationship that is livable with Jinshin. 

I'm looking forward to following their story in upcoming chapters and to see if there may be new characters that are even more kind to their victims. 

I like stories where you have dimension in the characters and their environment rather than just short and to the point although those kinds of stories do have their place this story carries you through an immersive world you can look forward to reading multiple times.

I am not the type of person that watches movies or read books more than once as I seem to pick up on the plot early and lose interest after the movie or book is done. I would say at this point you have not disappointed and have brought a story that can hold its reader captivated for the next chapter. There are only five writers including yourself in all the sites I am members of that have piqued my interest to anticipate your next upload of a new chapter. Kudos to you for that!! 😊

As always I am looking forward to reading the next chapter.    

Author's Response:

Wow. Words can't describe how much that compliment means to me. Thank you!

Your breakdown couldn't be more perfect. It makes me feel my writing abilities have panned out how I was hoping they would.

I'll have to try even harder to write a story that will exceed the expectations of my writers. This story is important to me, and I'll do everything in my power to deliver the best.

Thank you so much for reading, it's been a joy to entertain my audience!