[Report This]Date: July 09 2023 5:39 AM Title: Chapter 5 - 6:00PM
Great Story and plotlines. I was curious if we were going to learn more about Avaramix. I'm glad we were able to peak in on their world if just a little. Now we have three victims to follow and and looking forward to understanding the dynamic of Jinshin's personality and how she will treat our newest victim. This new development definitely hints of some possible concerns between Jinshin and Deita and how she will react to the knowledge she was betrayed by Jinshin telling Avaramix about her escapades with Liz. The dynamics between the characters are intriguing as we move forward through the story. There is so much potential in developing each character and their personalities and past that it keeps you interested moving forward. Great job on how you continue to develop ambience of the area surrounding our current characters.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response:
It's early still, but Jinshin and Deita do have a past. I really love seeing these breakdowns from you guys because it lets me know if my writing abilities are going in the right direction or not, and I think in this case it is! I still have a few more main characters to introduce, but at this time, it may not be until the second volume of this series. I am planning to have 12-13 chapters per volume, each volume progressing the storyline in different ways. While Blaire is the first character introduced, her actual purpose in this story may not showcase itself until the later end of the second volume, same for Deita and Jinshin.
I'm trying to finish the next chapter before I leave for camping, it's half done already I should make it in time. It's a full chapter to showcase the fate of Alicia after being purchased by Camilla. While I had fun with Deita and Liz, this coming chapter will take a different turn, which for spoilers I'll keep to myself.
Thanks for the great feedback, it's very appreciated!