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Reviewer: MicroThaumaturge Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 12 2023 2:44 PM Title: Chapter 1

Ooh, very intriguing premise.  I've never been a fan of dream sequences - all too often they're used as an info dump, a "what if" scenario that is only tangential to the story, or to remove the consequences a powerful, evocative, attention-grabbing scene.  I have to admit, I like how you used the dream here.  It's the basis for the conflict that follows.  It's not imagery for the sake of spectacle, without consequences moving forward; rather it's the very kernel of the conflict within the MC.

I would consider this a strong start - it sets the tone well, sets the hook for the following chapters, and doesn't bog us down with exposition.  I'm looking forward to seeing what comes next!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much! This means a lot coming from you, I really admire your work!

Reviewer: Pixis Signed [Report This]
Date: July 04 2023 8:40 AM Title: Chapter 1

Good start. I love stories about fairies. The Attuning process is an interesting concept. And the dream sequence was very dramatic and sexy. I'm interested to see where this is going.



Author's Response: I'm excited too! Hope you like where it goes.

Reviewer: kbDArt Signed [Report This]
Date: July 03 2023 6:44 PM Title: Chapter 1

I'll wait til the end to review, but I like the opening chapter and it was a good idea to open with the dream sequence - immerses the reader right away.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much!

Reviewer: imaybegae Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 02 2023 6:58 PM Title: Chapter 1

 

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