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Reviewer: el_rooto Signed [Report This]
Date: September 07 2023 3:10 PM Title: Chapter 6 - Halfway Done

Just a couple of notes:

  1. "the one titled DDM" was better than "the rear housing guide", it conveyed Lori's unfamiliarity with the whole thing
  2. "first work" -> week

And don't get me started on the whole protection thing, or I'll end up telling you again how much I love Lori...



Author's Response:

:)

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