[Report This]Date: December 18 2023 4:35 PM Title: Chapter 8
The chapter title is gone, and "excitedlly", and "Lor didn't" - merry Xmas to me :D
The gratitude got me thinking about a parallel universe (or just another subject?) where he shows some gratitude, and how things would go... most likely Lori would decide that he can take more and just increase the DDM?
PS
Merry Christmas!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the feedback as always! Lori sure does decide some gratitude!
Date: September 07 2023 3:10 PM Title: Chapter 6 - Halfway Done
Just a couple of notes:
- "the one titled DDM" was better than "the rear housing guide", it conveyed Lori's unfamiliarity with the whole thing
- "first work" -> week
And don't get me started on the whole protection thing, or I'll end up telling you again how much I love Lori...
Author's Response:
:)
Date: August 18 2023 3:12 PM Title: Chapter 5 - Lunch, Laundry, and Little Secrets
Ouch, $90 only... barely enough to pay for Becca's tiny to pay the rent I suppose.
Author's Response:
They don't need much!
[Report This]Date: August 18 2023 9:35 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Special Delivery [September 22, 2005]
Ah, one of my favorite series returns! Haven't read the new chapter yet, just wanted to leave a comment out of excitement
Date: July 08 2023 1:08 PM Title: Chapter 4 - Unboxing [September 22, 2005]
She likes that he thinks she's about to end his involvement in the experiment... I've said this already, but the more I reread the more I appreciate finer details like this and somehow they all make me love Lori :D
Author's Response:
She is very lovable! <3
Date: June 17 2023 12:49 PM Title: Chapter 3 - Participation
The four hours thing was in the old version, AND it still survives when Lori reports to Dr Walker in Becca's story - "4 hours of confinement in your rear was a great start for the first day. Not every Participant achieves that so congratulations. After the first day, you complied with the 1-Week DDM requirement and housed him in your rear for at least 6-hours per day"
Date: May 28 2023 11:31 AM Title: Chapter 2 - The Right Price [August 19th, 2005]
It happened again :)
Then misc notes, I'll spare you how much I love that woman for this once...
"R&R" -> "RR" because?
The DDM went 4->6 hours with no mention that it's 4 in the first day and then 6, but I guess they will tell her afterwards.
Author's Response:
When it came to developing logos, it just looked better without the ampersand :)
Also, I did a search for "4 hours" and didn't see one in this story. It should be 3 hours for 1-day commitments and then 6 hours for 1-week commitments. Where did you see the 4 hour reference?
[Report This]Date: May 21 2023 2:51 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Special Delivery [September 22, 2005]
as if her daughet's eyes were what? ("on her" in the previous version)
wow, having reread most of it 2 months ago I didn't remember she was seeing a therapist... too bad it's unlikely a certain someone will take credit for it.
PS
Lori is back!!!
Author's Response:
Good catch, thanks. And yes, she is!