Date: February 25 2024 2:54 AM Title: Chapter 2 - Part 5
Nice story so far; but what about the present day hikers? What is happening to them, if anything?
Could use a little more past and present story line like the earlier chapters, as opposed to just the past chapters. That is unless the past is going to crash upon the future.
Regardless of the time continuum, this is a really interesting and intriguing story which is very entertaining to read. Please continue and keep up the great work.
BTW, it was King Arthur's father Uther Pendragon who started all the fooling around with various relatives and other men's wifes. Perhaps his sins should be called out as a root of betrayal in your story.
Author's Response:
Hi there, thank you for your feedback, as always you provide very thoughtful and detailed feedback which is thought provoking and interesting perspectives.
There will be more back and forth with the hikers, and yes its going to start building to something.
Thanks for your ideas, I wasn't done with King Arthur and his kin just yet, I think I had some slightly different ideas but I like your thoughts and approach; that's very interesting!
Glad you are enjoying this story, I quite like the variation in writing something quite different to the norm...
Wish you well and hope you continue to enjoy and support my work
Rich
[Report This]Date: January 25 2024 4:16 AM Title: Chapter 2 - Part 4
Fantastic story. Please continue and update more often.
I like the little historical inclusions you have, such as "Seraphim" which is a messenger of God.
Can't wait until the six hikers are used to fulfill Ember's well.
Isn't the King Arthur tell of English ancestry? "Kurczyc'" is Polish roughly translated to "shrink", wouldn't "crine" be more appropriate to the language of 5-6th century A.D. English Celtics?
Author's Response:
Thank you, I always enjoy reading your reviews. I find your feedback to be well considered and thought provoking. I can tell you read my stories with detail which is appreciated. Glad you have enjoyed this and you picked up on some of my little historical inclusions like Seraphim as the messenger of God, did you notice that a number of the witches in some other parts of the Tales of Myth and Legend stories Bradb, the Irish war goddess and Morrigan, goddess of death, amongst a number of the other? Keep an eye out for these.
The hikers will be experiencing Ember's powers at some point, but one of them might not be at her mercy... hint...
King Arthur is indeed of English legend, and good spot on 'Kurczyc'. However you might notice that each of the 'eternal' witches has their own way of exhibiting their powers. For Ember it is Kurczyc, for Aqualisha it is Winzig, Morrigan (Medusa) doesn't even use language she shrinks or grows things with her eyes. Bradb can immerse herself and flow walk... and so on. Some of the witches have spread their teachings and their covens in this story, which is why some other of the more contemporary witches in each generation follow the teachings of their witch, such as a number of them shrink using Kurczyc...
Did Ember create the word first or did the Polish language? I'll let you decide :-)