Date: January 26 2023 4:53 PM Title: A Mother's Thoughts on Candy
Overall, I enjoyed what you added to my story. Mr. Winston shrinking people on purpose is not what I had in mind initially, but it's more unique than the whole thing being an accident. The new ending for Clayton was pretty neat too. I'm interested to see what you do in the sequel, since that will be a completely original story. For that, I think it would make sense for some people at the party to be so drunk they basically have the same thought process as Alice.
Thanks ALBoE, I appreciate you allowing me to borrow it. :)
Yes, I added a bit of sinister nature to the shrinking.
For the sequel, I'm thinking of a mixture of unaware and aware for the predators. The planners will be in on it, the rest of the partygoers perhaps not.
Date: January 25 2023 4:41 PM Title: A Shrinking Suspicion
I am thrilled so far....this is better than the original so far...I hope there is still an unconscious action by the mother, for example that she wants to prepare the sweet corn and also no longer wears glasses, for example
Wow, you were pretty close on what I actually wrote. Almost an unaware action on the mother's part, but she was alerted to his humanity at the last moment.