Reviewer: Ubersalamander Signed [Report This]
Date: October 14 2022 1:24 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Motherly Mind Control

Neat idea. Interested to see where it goes. However, the emotes in the text were a little distracting. I think you should trust yourself to convey the emotion in the dialogue without them.

Author's Response:

Hey I'm glad you're interestedal! And thanks for the feedback

In the next chapters I won't be including emotes, and will trust myself to convey emotions through the dialog

Reviewer: mjgtsft Signed [Report This]
Date: October 13 2022 5:49 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Motherly Mind Control

I've really enjoyed the beginning of this story! Can't wait to see where this is going ^^