Reviewer: Edgedej4 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 21 2022 5:47 AM Title: Chapter 1 - The Classroom

Good stuff. Albeit short, but still a nice way to end the chapter. 

Your writing style and prose leaves a very nice picture in the readers mind. It isn’t mundane or boring either, there’s a few language techniques and changes of tone or type and style too. A minor nitpick would be that while the sense of scale is conveyed, more time lingering on it would serve nice. At least in my opinion.

Overall, if this is for the long haul, it’s got promise.

Reviewer: fatal15 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 15 2022 10:44 PM Title: Chapter 1 - The Classroom

Very well written. I’m definitely interested in where this goes.