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Reviewer: DrNefario Signed [Report This]
Date: April 11 2024 6:05 AM Title: Prologue - Chapter 1

Good book 



Enjoy read 

Reviewer: Abcdefghijklmnop Signed [Report This]
Date: March 13 2024 10:18 PM Title: Epilogue - Chapter 64

2 years a lot of work but this story if finally done. One of the best things I've ever read on this website and wonderfully well done. The creators were all nice listening and reading reviews from readers but the story is fantastic. You usually never get a gentle giantess story especially one that it's complete. If you like that sort of stuff I totally recommend this one. 



Author's Response:

Thank you so much! I'm glad we could make our mark within this sub-genre! 

Reviewer: Melanie Signed [Report This]
Date: March 06 2024 10:21 AM Title: Prologue - Chapter 1

It's Melanie once again! Figured that with the story coming to an end it was about time. I sincerely hope everyone enjoyed what we accomplished with Magna Gratia, because I certainly did! It has been a huge honor and a ton of fun to help make this story what it is today for almost one and a half years now. Of course, I'll continue helping out with any bonus chapters and future stories as well, I can't wait to show them off to everyone else. Make sure to check out all the other "short" stories we wrote if you haven't yet, they're all amazing as well, and it'll help bridge the wait for the next big story. And finally, thanks to everyone who left a review on the stories, they really mean a lot to us! ^-^



Author's Response:

Thanks a ton, Mel <3 I couldn't ask for a better coauthor than you.

Here's hoping that you'll (((someday))) write and upload your own story!

Reviewer: DarcKage Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 01 2024 11:15 AM Title: Prologue - Chapter 1

The kiss between Jeannine and Nick was unexpected, I'm actually not sure if it implied more than it was but it was still surprising to see since it was always Sara that flirted with him.

Enjoyed this story from beginning to end, sad to see it go but maybe there's hope for a new story or side stories that show how they're all doing in the future, and how all the new tinies are faring. Amazing story and I look forward to whatever's next :)



Author's Response:

It was meant to be platonic--a spontaneous moment of affection after such an intense series of events--but I can see how you would think that. Just to be clear, Jeannine and Nick are just friends. The best of friends, but nothing more. 

I'm also a little sad to end it, but it needed to be done. Better than to keep going and ruin what I had! I will inevitably revisit this eventually, maybe even sooner than you think? Look forward to the bonus chapters :)

I will continue to write and upload, that isn't changing. I hope you'll enjoy our new projects!

Reviewer: Wholia Signed [Report This]
Date: December 28 2023 9:34 AM Title: Part 5 - Chapter 58

This one was really really cute and sweet. I enjoyed it a lot. Thank you! <3

Author's Response:

Thanks, Wholia! It was really enjoyable to write. Glad you liked it!

Reviewer: kenrios Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 27 2023 6:40 PM Title: Part 5 - Chapter 58

Many times we see on the site some story about "Goddesses of destruction" or something like the wrath of the goddess on the city as she destroys everything. Rarely do you see a story where the "Goddess" helps the little ones create something. I say, it is often easier to destroy than to create. And this chapter is like a teaching of that. Jeanine helps these little ones to create but helping is not enough, it is the awareness of taking care of what you have or what you have managed to create. I think that and not believing in the tendency to underestimate those "lower" than us are the teachings of this chapter. Well... at least the ones I took with me.



Author's Response:

You hit the nail on the head. My only comment would be that I never intended for Jeannine to be a 'goddess', rather just a big girl with and even bigger heart. I'm very happy you enjoyed the chapter, Kenrios!

Reviewer: DarcKage Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 07 2023 4:24 PM Title: Prologue - Chapter 1

The Sara and Nick teases are too much. On one hand I'd want to see them get together but on the other, it's a relationship that'd be near impossible to make work.

I wonder what else you have planned for these two :)



Author's Response:

I've got some fun stuff in mind, but nothing too special. I'm more interested in writing about their friendship than romance tbh

Reviewer: manwith2names Signed [Report This]
Date: December 02 2023 11:55 PM Title: Part 4 - Chapter 49

😉😈



Author's Response: ;)

Reviewer: manwith2names Signed [Report This]
Date: November 30 2023 3:45 AM Title: Part 4 - Chapter 41

My cheeks....clenched



Author's Response:

Lolololol

Reviewer: manwith2names Signed [Report This]
Date: November 29 2023 3:06 PM Title: Part 4 - Chapter 37

I was kind of scared that you were going to tie Icarus to his own tale and unalive him.  Got me really tense.  Also I really love the stern yet friendly punishment of destroying the car with ease.  Jeannine is surely powerful



Author's Response:

I wanted to put my own spin on the myth. Couldn't resist!

Reviewer: manwith2names Signed [Report This]
Date: November 26 2023 2:28 AM Title: Part 1 - Chapter 10

I have been enjoying this story so far.  I love the pov's and the interactions.  This size is one of my favorites.  As I continue to read I wonder did you have the idea to only have these two races of sized people, or were there going to be different groups?  I ask based on the idea that the characters refer to themselves and each other as liliputian and brobdingnagian



Author's Response:

In this world I've crafted, there are Lillis, Gullis, and Brobs, but we never see any Gullis. Obvious disclaimer: The races/sizes are not my own. I borrowed and adapted them from existing works for my own purposes. 

Reviewer: DarcKage Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 09 2023 1:01 PM Title: Prologue - Chapter 1

Great chapter as usual, I'm curious what the plan is to deal with Luca. 


Also, I've been wondering something for a while now in the way Jeannine speaks. Why is it that she always speaks in a formal manner? She'll say 'I will not' instead of 'I won't' or 'He is a smart guy' instead of 'he's a smart guy'. I noticed she's the only one doing it so it wasn't a matter of writing style, just her in particular. 



Author's Response:

That's intentional. Every character in the story has a "voice". There are words they prefer, styles of speaking, and more habits that make them unique. Jeannine is one of three characters who generally don't use contractions, with the exception of when she is with Nick or Sara. I put all kinds of little details like that in the story, so I'm very happy someone noticed! 

Reviewer: kenrios Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 18 2023 7:43 PM Title: Part 5 - Chapter 51

Interesting chapter. Mayor Saverine is an interesting character. I think the Magna Gratia experience can be really enriching for Jeannine and Sara. Or really destructive if they do not treat this issue carefully. I mean, they are both studying political science and it is good that they are seeing what this whole thing about leading a society into the future is about. In that sense, I think that Mayor Rin can even act as a guide for the two Brobs. Or if Magna Gratia, the ambassador of Lilliputia, which we saw at the beginning, is ever discovered, consider this city more than a crime but an example of what could be achieved with good will and love.



Author's Response:

I'm glad you like Saverine, I rarely hear anyone talk about her so that makes me happy :)

That is a major theme of this story. What can be achieved with good will and love. I really like how you phrased that. To me, a big, powerful giantess can be such a force of good for those smaller than her. Too often size comes with feelings of superiority and authority over the small. I'm glad you drew that conclusion from my writing.

Reviewer: DrNefario Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 01 2023 9:29 PM Title: Prologue - Chapter 1

Hey it me! The creep who berates you with

question about your story at 4 am. I decided to write a petty lengthy review of what I think about this wonderful piece of literature you’ve created. Giving some criticism, praise, and some hopes I have for the story. Forgive me if there are any typos. I started writing this at 3 in the morning cause of insomnia so although I can’t fall asleep, my brain still feels like mush.


First, the bad. 


Ok, this is a pretty hot take, I apologize if this critique sounds harsh, but Nick’s character appears somewhat lacking. He had the potential to vividly portray how individuals cope with trauma and the process of living with horrific experiences, which aligns with your intentions. However, you miss opportunities to delve into the nuances of his reactions to nightmarish situations. This oversight could be somewhat problematic and potentially insensitive. While it’s not a significant issue, it still exists. In media, these symptoms are often overlooked, and Magna Gratia seems to fall into that trap. For instance, in chapter 15, when Jeannie brings Nick into the bathroom, you state his emotions without truly showing them. Instead I believe It would be beneficial to elaborate on how he freezes up, how time seems to slow, and how he struggles to process his trauma, rather than just telling us. You could also explore the resurfacing memories of his tribe’s tragic fate. Even though he wasn’t in a joyful mood upon arriving at Jeannie’s place, adding more details could enhance his character. You could depict him having night terrors, tensing up at Jeannie’s powerful footsteps due to traumatic associations with his parents getting stomped , or experiencing various trauma responses like fight, flight, freeze, or fawn. Trauma doesn’t have a neat beginning, middle, and end; it’s more like a lightning strike, chaotic and disorganized. Often times when people try to recalling horrific events. They have a hard time organizing their thoughts. I’m critiquing Nick because the other characters feel realistic by comparison. Nick comes across as somewhat bland, except for the scene where Sarah causes his panic attack, which felt authentic. But maybe there was something I missed idk. 



I guess I’m kind of going after low hanging fruit sense this is a story about 6 mile high people so logic is kinda thrown out the window. But I understand that realism is important to you so I’ll give it anyways. Ain’t no way the soil on Lilliput is able to support the mega flora native to Brobdignag. Nor would it rain enough and if it did Lilliput would probably be underwater.


Another Logical issue I had with the story  Is that if Jeannie really cared about saving Lilliputians so much. Why doesn’t she just take them Lili controlled section of Lilliput? I mean I get that it might be expensive but couldn’t she just use Magna Gartia as like a terminal until she has the funds. I have no clue how big Lilliput is but, surly for someone as large as her it can’t be too far. I’m sure it’s just a train ride away. Maybe I’m underestimating the scale of Lilliput. But the solution just seems so obvious. Not only would they be much safer there but i imagine they would be a lot happier. As nice as Jeannie is, I would imagine that she is a constant reminder to them about how insignificant they are. They wouldn’t be reminded of this in Lilliput, at least not constantly. And I’d imagine it also provides the Lilies much more agency over their lives. This might also be “low hanging fruit” but it’s worth mentioning. 


On the topic of our oversized protagonist. I love Jeannie to death. But she can be such an airhead sometimes. One instance that comes to mind is when Nick confronts her about the Gigis incident. Her reasoning for not taking action is “because it wouldn’t have changed a thing. She would have done it sooner or later” forgive my crude language. But this is bullshit. Even if she was going to return and do it later, it would still have been better to save at least a few Lilliputians rather than just sitting around with her thumb up her ass. Even if Lilies where eventually going to die it’s best to at least put some effort in. And if she had, those Lillies that Sarah devoured would still be alive. Not only that, but she could have at least reported the Gigis to the authorities. Maybe by leaving an anonymous message. Again maybe I missed something but she didn’t even do that. 


 

This isn’t a complaint. But I originally was expecting the mode of production used in Magna Gratia to operate more communally. But I guess I was wrong. Now the Lilies get to experience the wonders of exploitation!


Anyways, that’s all I had to say when it came to criticism. Sorry for being such a Debby downer. The story isn’t bad by any means. Again it’s incredible, In fact that’s why I criticized it in the first place. Because of how much effort was put into it and how realistic it is. I’m sorry if the tone sounds a little rude. Now to the positives as well as some hopes I have for the story. 


The story’s good. In my opinion it’s one of the best on this site and it’s definitely the best when it comes to wholesome content. As stated in my hissy fit. Most of my praises however have already been said by other people so I’ll try to be a little original. Even it might not be as long as my explanation for the things I dislike. The characters are so realistic and it’s clear that a lot of time and effort was put into how they interact with each other. They feel like real people. I don’t know how to describe it. It just “flows” nicely. The characters are just so likable (minus Sarah) and they just have this natural charm to them. And even though I think that some of the ways you express emotions can be a little cliché. It’s still nice that they exist instead of it just being some dumb smut story about where the only things people fear are feeling horny and feeling terrified. You’re also very descriptive too and it’s crystal clear that you put so much time and effort into this story. Thank God you’re co author finally got you to publish this out here because it’s just so good, 


 The level of detail in this story is staggering, , especially in how you portray the immense disparity in scale between Lilies and Brobs. The depiction of Magna Gratia’s encounter with Jeannies mother genuinely horrified me. The way you described Lou hugging Ori in what they believed to be their final moments, transforming a seemingly ordinary character into a harbinger of doom radiating an aura of despair and destruction, is both ludicrous and profound, a talent I could never replicate. However, I struggle to fathom the enormity of these colossal beings, but I acknowledge that envisioning something as towering as Mount Everest is no easy task. If there’s any way to assist me in grasping their size, perhaps a visual aid, such as a picture, would be helpful. I did see the render of Jeannie and Magna Gratia on your Patreon. Is that an accurate representation? I suspect I might be imagining them as even larger than they truly are.




 Nonetheless, what I yearn for most is an expansion of your world-building. While the concept is not entirely novel in the size community, I find myself deeply enamored with the world you’ve crafted. It’s regrettable that not many authors explore this aspect, though it is undeniably the crux of the story. I desire a deeper understanding of the Brobdingnagians beyond their perspective on size. What is their culture like? Are they individualistic or more communal in nature? How does their government function? Is it a unitary or federal system? They seem to resemble a republic or a form of democracy, but what kind precisely? Do they function like states or is it a constitutional monarchy? What defines being a Brobdingnagian? What are the pros and cons of their society? You briefly mentioned the Brobs celebrating Christmas; does that suggest a significant number of them are Christians? How did this come about? Did the Gulliverians play a role in their religious beliefs? As peculiar as it may sound, the prospect of a Brobdingnagian inquisition is fascinating! You have such an interesting world and It brings me great joy to even just learn about the small stuff. 


Now I get that this is kinda supposed to be the “wholesome version of Cities In The Cellar (and the version that’s you know…..actually good) but I really want to see some some Gulliverian characters. Again I have to state that the world  you’ve created has so much potential. It would be interesting to see there perspective. To see the perspective of someone in size limbo, where you’re both colossal and minuscule. It would be a great way for us to get to understand their culture and their relationship with brobdignagians. Perhaps there is hostility between the two. What’s there government like? Are they radically different in terms of ideology? It would be pretty cool to read about a Cold War between Brobdignag and Gulivaria. 


On top of that, I had a couple of stupid and borderline pointless questions I wanted to ask you because, of course, I do. This time, however, I also had some questions on the development of Magna Gratia.


My first question was: What are the nations that exist in this world? Is it just Gullivaria and New Brobdignag, or are there other Brobdignagian countries?


Are Nick and Ori literate? I mean, I would imagine most remnants aren’t since it's not like they can go to school, and I doubt reading helps much with survival.


What kind of college does Jeannie go to? Is it prestigious? What's it called? (The reason I'm asking this is that I'm currently going through the college admissions process, so it's kinda the only thing I can think about, unfortunately.)


What's Jeannie's dad like? Did she get her merciful and caring personality from him? I mean, there is no way she got it from her mom.


What's Old Brobdignag like? Are they apart of the same country as new Brobdignag?


This one's kinda personal, so I don't really expect you to answer it. Sorry if I'm being nosy, but did you take any sort of political science class? Or did you just research some topics for the story?


And finally, what is your advice for writing stories like these? Or just writing in general? Iv been creating an overview for a story that Iv been wanting to write for a little while. How did you plan Magna Gratia out?


That was all the questions I had, but before I end this, I just wanted to say thank you. Thank you for not only writing such a wonderful story but also taking the time out of your day to respond to random creeps who have a thing for giant people. You have responded to literally every comment you have gotten. Not a lot of people here do that. You're a great person and a hella good author. I'm even a little jealous of your talent to write. Keep on writing and again thanks for publishing this for all of us to enjoy.


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Author's Response:

First of all, thank you for the review. It's the longest and most detailed I've ever gotten! 

It's nice to hear both the good and the bad, and while I don't agree with everything you have said, I definitely understand where you are coming from. A few of the things you brought up were addressed at some point, if memory served? Others were not. The most important point you brought up was Nick's trauma. Melanie and I both wanted this story to be a happy one. While I don't mean to ignore or make light of such a serious topic, I felt it did not have a big place in the story. The characters, Nick more than the rest, are focused on the future. Moving on, improving, and being happy. I hope that when people read our story, it makes them happy. Or hopeful. Or just simply brightens their day. That's all I really want in the end. I didn't shy away from it, rather, I consciously chose to talk about it as little as possible.

As for the good, I think you give me too much credit. There are a few chapters Melanie and I are very proud of, but we are both amateurs. We have a long way to go, but we are always trying to get better. Thank you, again.

You hit me with so many questions that I don't really know where to begin! If you want to have a chat with me, my discord is mentioned somewhere in the replies. You can find it and chat with me when I am free. I can't promise I will have every answer, but I will do my best :)


Melanie asked me to share some of her comments, so here they are in so specific order:

1. "As for the writing advice... Personally I'd say just do it. Don't overthink it too much. Having something on a page, even if it's horrible, is still better than if it's all just in your head. Editing something flawed is easier than trying to do it perfectly from the get-go."

2. "As we've discussed before I do like the idea of Lilli society being more productive and logic-oriented, which allowed (and still allows) them to progress much faster than anyone else. Brobs on the other hand are more hedonistic, always looking for something to induce pleasure. This has its good sides like being great at making food as a society, but it's also part of what drove them to exploit Lilliputia. (At least that's how I imagine it)"

3. "She'd risk getting in serious trouble for buying/kidnapping Lillies. She is clearly helping them but that's how the law sees her actions. What remains of Lilliput is not necessarily safe either. Anytime they might have to interact with a Brob could be their last and Brob society wouldn't care about prosecuting it. Who knows if they even accept more people there. It's a small patch of land and I presume they have limited resources. As much as it sucks, Jeannine might just be turned away, have her friends taken away, and then they're sent to who-knows-where and end up with who-knows-who. J knows from Icarus and Daedalus that the system is corrupt and Brobs will just blatantly get away with it."

(Forgive the crudeness, this was copied from our recent conversation)


Your review really made my day. No, my week! Melanie's as well. Thank you for reading and I hope you enjoy the last few chapters of this story. 

Reviewer: Abcdefghijklmnop Signed [Report This]
Date: September 03 2023 3:13 AM Title: Part 4 - Chapter 47

This is like my favorite story out there. The focus on real world scenarios are written in a way where it seems realistic. I hope that this story continues and if you reply I would love to find a way to share some ideas.



Author's Response: Thank you! Sure, you can find me on discord as geno33

Reviewer: ShrunkenNinja Signed [Report This]
Date: August 09 2023 12:31 PM Title: Part 4 - Chapter 45

Oops, now I ship Sara and Nick



Author's Response: Oh my!

Reviewer: slogro Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 05 2023 12:39 PM Title: Prologue - Chapter 1

What can I say? I enjoy this story tremendously, and adore getting to read about these characters. Then, even better, I have the wonderful opportunity to chat with you about this story and give feedback that I see unfold in front of me! Thanks you, I am looking forward to so many more stories together ^^ 



Author's Response: Thank you so much, slo! You have been a major influence on me and my writing. I can't thank you enough for the motivation you gave me, let alone the help with writing chapters 43-45. I wish you the best in all you writing, my friend. And I hope we can work together on something fun in the future :D

Reviewer: kenrios Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 03 2023 3:42 AM Title: Part 4 - Chapter 44

Hi, greetings Melanie. I love this story that you and Geno are writing. Each chapter is an engaging experience. When you start reading you can't take your eyes off and it makes you immerse yourself in the story until you even feel or imagine the scenes or the feelings of the person. It's good that you manage to convey those emotions because it certainly makes the reading have many nuances that make it very dynamic. Keep it up and thanks for sharing this wonderful story in the community.

As for the chapter, say that Nick's trauma came to light in a psychological way that is natural. But I would just like to say a phrase that is widely used in my country:


"The longest path begins with the first step."


I guess Nick took that "first step" in this chapter. Let's see how long it takes him to go down that path. Although the speed does not matter but to reach the end. :)



Author's Response: I agree with all of the above! Trauma is a sensitive issue and I wanted to address it with tact. It took a lot of work to write these chapters. Longer than any other in the entire story. Can you believe I had to do 4 rewrites? Every time I made a draft, it just wasn't...right. Something was missing. Getting both Nick and Sara's dialogue just right was hard. I hope the result is as good as Melanie and I hoped.

Reviewer: Melanie Signed [Report This]
Date: July 31 2023 4:44 PM Title: Prologue - Chapter 1

Hiya everyone, mostly silent coauthor here! While I've been helping out with a few chapters in the last few months, the upcoming ones involving Sara will have some of my biggest influence so far. Obviously, Geno is still the true mastermind, but I still hope you'll enjoy what I contributed! ^-^
I'm looking forward to see everyone's reactions in their reviews. :3



Author's Response: She speaks! I'm very happy you decided to make yourself known, Melanie! Melanie is a friend of mine and my amazing coauthor for (almost) every story I have written. None of what I do would be possible without her help or editing. While she never likes to take credit, I hope you will all show her some love. She is incredibly talented and I know you will all enjoy her stories, if and when she decides to post them.

Reviewer: DrNefario Signed [Report This]
Date: July 27 2023 12:22 PM Title: Prologue - Chapter 1

God this chapter was amazing. It’s definitely my favorite to date. I love the way you write right Sara. Like the amount hatred I have for her is ludicrous. She’s just so childish and entitled. Especially when she tried to play the victim. Like dude I wanted to decapitate her. And although we haven’t seen much of brobdingnagian  culture and their ideals (other than their views on small folk) I feel like she is the physical manifestation of her people(or at least their culture). Just a bunch of mile high entitled, self righteous, airheads that kill and destroy and don’t give a damn.  Just like Nick you can’t help but hate her and the brobs in general.(with the exception of you know who)



Or perhaps that’s what I thought when I first read the chapter. As I pondered about it for a bit I developed a theory. While I do still think that Sara’s a priggish asshole. I think that deep down somewhere in her psyche. A small bit of guilt is starting to grow. I think that as she begins to realize just how human these Lilies are. The souls of the ones she ate will start to haunt her more and more. I think right now, she’s just in denial. I mean it’s alot to process so it makes sense. However denial will only provide temporary salvation from the ever expanding guilt within her. Sooner or later it will overwhelm her. And honestly that’s a good thing. Because not only will it some what give justice to the Lilies she killed.  But it will also drive her to be a much better person. Perhaps it will motivate her to become an outspoken advocate for the rights of Lilliputians. Maybe Sara’s remorse will make her more passionate about Liberating Lilies than her BFF. In short I see a lot of potential in Sara even though she’s a dick. However, even if this is not the case this was still a great chapter and I’m exited to see how this is gonna play out.



Author's Response: Very interesting predictions! I cannot say much, as it will spoil what is to come, but I will say that some of what you guessed is right. Indeed, Sara is a prime example of the worst of Brob society, but at the same time, there is something different about her. What that is, you will have to wait and see. I hope you enjoy the next chapters!

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