[Report This]Date: March 12 2024 12:22 PM Title: Introduction and foundations
I love these stories i have read them many many times. I wish the the tiny would have been eaten in the bltt sandwich, but anyways great work
Date: August 15 2022 1:45 PM Title: Introduction and foundations
"[...]retard units if you like. – lol, sorry if anyone got offended, it was half a joke." - I am not offended (I am a "metric person" myself after all I find it funny. They are usually referred to as "Imperial Units" albeit the Empire that promoted them is dead, the country where they originated no longer uses them either and the only major country that still uses them is offended whenever someone calls them an Empire. Talk about a, quite fitting, problem with the naming convention.
"The industrial shrinking process is not cheap and not very common accordingly" - That sounds like if you are rich and diagnosed with a 'ticking time bomb' in your genes you could undergo this industrial shrinking process as a precaution to not be shrunk in a potentially life-threatening situation. Maybe you can even learn to cope with it by shrinking in steps instead of all the way down to a few centimeters in height all at once...
"[...]claim they have some ways to lessen the odds of one catching the Shrinking virus or having their genetic condition erupt." - So you thought of this.
". There are also some small organizations that advocate Tinies rights." Simple Spelling Mistake
I don't know if that may already be in one or several of the Short Stories.
As this is my introduction to your world, I don't know whether they already be some, but you should consider writing (a) Multisize Scenario.
If the Society at large sees Shrunken ones as worthless there should be a clear 'I am bigger and therefore more human than you" hacking order in Tiny Farms (if they are a thing), which could lead to interesting interactions. Let's say two 10 cm Shrunks constantly bully a helpless 3cm Tiny and all three of them are sold to a teenage girl who intends to play with them before killing them and giving them to her Mom as simple tiny meat for cooking. I am sure mixed mashed meat may as well have Shrunks in them in this world anyway.
They would probably still retain their unreasonable superiority complex over the 3cm boy but compared to the girl they are just as helpless as he is. And if she realizes that the two bully the tiny one she probably would dislike that and show them comeuppance. Nobody likes bullies no matter the circumstances. Granted, "Mr. Smallest" will probably thank her, but still fully knows that she will eat him anyway.
Author's Response:
Ok WOW!
Thank you very much for this review, it helps a lot! Clearly you are a very interesting person to talk with about shrunken people and vore ideas.
About metric vs imperial units- I'm well aware of that. In fact, as an ex navy man I had to use these units and know them well. few years ago that whole "retard units" thing was a meme, I wrote this introduction a while ago.
Misspelling- Yes you are right. I'm sorry for that, and whenever I read my work again I notice few more, I really try to pay attention to them and I think I'm improving.
About the other ideas and suggestion about the construction of this world- Well, if you go on and read the stories, or just a few of them, you'll see that I develop the world. also, each story might introduce a bit different social construction, with different treatment towards shrunken people.
Your great review makes me think I should rewrite the introduction, make stuff more clear, and maybe cut the parts that might be offensive.
Thank you for this and I hope you'll find some of the stories inside (as chapters) to your liking!