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Reviewer: DcZ Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 16 2022 5:08 AM Title: The Goddess Awakens

Fair on the craftsman and town, at least food wont be an issues like I proposed. 

And interesting take on demons and succubus and how they relate to gods. And true, one or a few might still be be out there needing to hav their mess cleaned up.  

I also PMeded you a thing on discord, didn’t want potential spoilers for others. 



Author's Response:

I don't really use discord, but yeah they can probably use the magic to take care of most aspects of temple upkeep and supply. Real monasteries managed with a lot less than Vann's got after all!

Reviewer: DcZ Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 16 2022 3:52 AM Title: The Goddess Awakens

Yeah, Enid giving some plant growth acelerant and fertilizer magic, Rumana make some golem planters and plows and harvesters, maybe even at tiny size, and a whole shrunken farm second could had. Unshink the food and thats a town’s worth of food saved for the temple at least. And make forest or made up farmland around the city models regrow for even more realism. 

And originally had to think of pure hard-light illusion, but that might not give squishing or real food as easily, or maybe polymorph insects into looking and acting like people, but that is also sorta cruel (and some people might have issue) so just animating berries was the final thought. 

Thought there prob will have to be given options of eating tinies as a part of the room service, and for new priestesses, might not make as much faith for Zenovia as real people or be usable in the rituals needing sacrifice, but maybe its the act and intent/thought that counts. 

And hopefully some cobblers, seamstresses and armorers become followers so their would be clothing and armour directly approved of by Zenovia. Several crafters shrink down and enchant some heels so much the shoes or boots technically count as a temple, then applied that to an entire set of armour. Thats gada be some powerful paladin gear.

Oh, and how Faries/Faeries/Fae or pixies will come in will be interesting. 


Eletha might take to Chadwick’s dad about what she did, thats kinda what I was talking about for seeing how that goes, was hard and kinda messy already with just him, and not the rest of his family. 

More to help Vann’s temple, Eletha might know some elf who’s been doing combat for several thousand years, and ask her to come over and help train up the  temple guard and paladin order. Could even have figured out non-magicaly-asidted/enhanced high heeled combat out of sheer boredom, just for the heeled bonus on too of magical assistance. Or just brainstorm more combat uses of Zenovia’s magic in combat with Vann. Probably not as good or powerful as the war/battle/violence god ones, but still solid. 


And I almost forgot this, cam up with it 3 chapters ago but forgot to say, how would succubi work? Their sexy and dom men as women whits is Zenvia’s thing, but their unholy so they might get hurt, or would they counter her power? Would it work on female devils, or other unholy female things? The real questions.



Author's Response:

As a general thing I'm sure that Vann can figure out some way for a potential guest to live out her vore fantasies if she so desires, after all Zenovia's temple is a place of power for him and almost anything is possible. Furthermore like most medieval temples I'm sure a small town will spring up around him, complete with the usual tradesfolk who may be able to garner the blessings of a goddess on their wares.

As far as Eletha and Chadwick's dad in this setting humans are able to figure out things a little faster than elves are, or they mature faster, whichever you prefer. Chadwick's dad probably has an idea that he's not the first in the line that Eletha has "played" with but he opted to just let sleeping dogs be on that front. The dead relatives obviously all know and are just waiting to greet her in the afterlife, obviously whatever complaints they have with her are outweighed by general friendship.

As far as succubi go I figure demons are probably in service to a particular god or goddess, Zenovia herself might have a few that are long dormant or a few of other deities might be willing to work for her in the meantime, Zenovia's a fairly mercurial deity overall outside of her infatuation with Vann and friends so an evil succubus could probably get away with a lot while working for her. You might say that Vann himself is sent to right Zenovia after centuries of her own mistakes, as we saw with The Mistress.

Reviewer: akilmilo Signed [Report This]
Date: September 15 2022 9:06 PM Title: The Goddess Awakens

Elytha foot moment in last chapter is as good as I expected from you. I'll probably reread it later for inspiration. Thanks.



Author's Response:

Glad it hit the mark! Generally I try to throw review requests in when I can, the audience also lends itself to inspiration haha. Anyways the Eletha feet scene definitely fits the story and the character so thanks for the suggestion.

Reviewer: Pok420 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 09 2022 4:49 PM Title: The Goddess Awakens

Hopefully she stays big and has her way with chidwick



Author's Response:

She'll get some playtime with him, unfortunately she can only stay 500 feet tall for a few hours, still she got to have fun smashing some stuff

Reviewer: DcZ Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 02 2022 2:24 AM Title: The Goddess Awakens

Oh and here the bikini armour thing, embedded links don’t work :(   

https://www.reddit.com/r/ImpracticalArmour/comments/w96l5j/the_truth_about_chainmail_bikini_by_mcnostril/

And a good gag is Full Body Armour, search is on that sub or in r/gaming .



Author's Response:

I've seen it, very amusing!

Reviewer: hanssmith7670 Signed [Report This]
Date: August 30 2022 4:11 PM Title: The Goddess Awakens

I had to drop by to tell you, EXCELLENT WORK! I have to say, I usually don’t read too much in the realm of fantasy with elves and such. But this story has blown me away! Quite the concept, very refreshing to read! I’m most certainly hooked! Keep up the amazing work, appreciate you and your efforts! Also don’t worry, I’m not sleeping on your other works, you have quite the portfolio going! 



Author's Response:

Good to hear, I feel like my back catalogue has something for everyone! A lot of people tell me they don't usually like fantasy or sci-fi but end up following it anyway, that's something that boosts the ego lol.

Reviewer: Lupin Signed [Report This]
Date: August 28 2022 1:15 PM Title: The Goddess Awakens

As a response to your previous response to me. Yeah I assumed Eletha's coping since if she keeps herself from getting attached to indivual friends she'll never have to mourn them which is still really unhealthy. Thus makes her look cold and arrogant since she's treating them like disposable/interchangable pets, as stated by Chadwich. Also even if she's bored of her Elvish family at least theyre all still alive. The same cannot be said about the rest of the crew who have all lost close family members. This is probably why she doesn't know how to mourn since she hasn't ever experienced personal loss unlike the rest of the crew. I wouldn't wish immortality on anybody, I'd probably kill myself before watching all my loved ones wither away especially those younger than me. Probably why Tolkien made Arwen mortal at the end of Lord of the Rings, to spare her from that same thing. 

I guess immortality has made elves cold and emotionally unintelligent towards other races. Ironic as it may be I really like the fact that the Elves might not be as wise as they make themselves out to be with then having to rely on the races they look down on for advice/information. I wonder how long it'll take Eletha and the rest of the elves to replace that arrogance with humility.

Sorry for rambling on this one I just love your take on elves as deplorable and arrogant as they may be. 



Author's Response:

Underneath all the elven smugness Eletha's actually dealing with some pretty difficult emotions, like Enid said she's not really going to be happy living among elves ever again, but living with humans means you've got to watch them die. While she's far from suicidal you might say there is a reason why Eletha accepts the possibility of dying someday a lot more readily than other immortal beings might.

Reviewer: akilmilo Signed [Report This]
Date: August 28 2022 7:34 AM Title: The Goddess Awakens

What I mean about immortal elves is if they procreate ince every 100 years and don't die they will have the same numbers as humans if not more



Author's Response:

Most settings with immortal elves have them reproduce a lot less than that, for example in Lord of the Rings Elrond was like 8,000 years old and had two children in that time. For this story Eletha's over 800 and the only time she considered stopping for children was when she thought she was going to have to "save" Chadwick's lineage. The thing with an immortal species is they also don't need to prioritize reproduction and expansion the way a mortal one must.

Reviewer: DcZ Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 24 2022 4:50 AM Title: The Goddess Awakens

Yeah, fair that she couod be young and not realise it, and all the pain of and work to make a perfect king, cause like you said woth Crusader Kings, its way to easy to loos it all, and thats assuming being in isolation and extreem controll. Some other humans might notice/find out and not want a king put there by an elf period, or some unluky plague gets the perosn, and then thers even older elves which might come along to stop it becaus they’ve been wiser. 

And then there the elfes that sucseded at theses, the backfire statistic (some elf had to have looked into those even for intellectual curiosity), or the evil elves that needed to get stoped, or some early history horror stoies, might inform some more official rules on it and why elfe children ard how they are a out this, if one asked thier teachers/elders. But thats all decent background lore, not neceseraly relevent to the first male shosen of a feail domination godess that has macro and microphilia. 



For akilmilo’s fair point on the true immortality, might be the slow growth or maturation rate thats normaly there, or elves have an ultra low breeding chance compared to others, medieval infant mortality rate (if they already have a hard time with germ theory, without some elf only diseases as well), dying in wars that they had to have had in the past, elf on elf murder, dying on theses adventures (since if Vann handt shrunk, had more magic, skill and had wanted too, he could have killed Eletha, meaning another more powerful mage could, and thats just mages in a straight up fight) or anything else that can kill anyone. 

Or at least these might contribute enough. 




Author's Response: There will be more on Eletha's development as we go on, probably not a ton on elven society as a whole since it's not super relevant to this particular tale. Vann could definitely beat her if he really focused on it, he's more powerful and he could spend a few days having fun with Tyra and come at her almost unstoppable, of course they're all on the same side luckily.

Reviewer: akilmilo Signed [Report This]
Date: August 24 2022 4:15 AM Title: The Goddess Awakens

Immortal elves? The first time I see ones. Usually they just live 10 to 100 times longer than humans. Immortality usually preserved for divine (like  champions in this case), transcendents(who transcend the species(demon king, maybe his 4 main subordinats, human heroes born with supertalent in everything once per 1000 years or so, elven royality that possess superitem or some blessing from some primordial elf(blessings are limited in number, usually 12)) or some evil witches who need to sacrifice something for eternal youth. This is how you make sure there is no overpopulation or some kind of race domination. The more you live the harder it is to make kids and immortals can't have immortal as a kid without paying a price or at least have to limit it to one.

If you make an immortal race that can procreate then world will collapse from overpopulation and that race dominating others.



Author's Response: These guys are a lot like the Tolkien elves in that they do truly live forever, but they also reproduce and mature very slowly, and many of them never procreate at all. This being the kind of story it is you might say that they definitely have a sex drive, but for most of the time it's truly a recreational thing for them. As far as dominating other races, if you've got one elf who has practiced the sword for a thousand years against a hundred humans who have practiced the sword for six months, the hundred humans are going to win. Overall this story's elves are generally a benevolent lot, so they're easy friends with humans even if a lot of them are assholes.

Reviewer: akilmilo Signed [Report This]
Date: August 18 2022 8:39 AM Title: The Goddess Awakens

To previous guy: cute girl fox that is over 100 y o is not a beastkin. It's some kind of fox spirit. Beastkin are usually human experiments or descendants of spirit and human while spirit is naturally evolved beast that is a lot more magical than average human and it's very hard to find one. 

To Author: cute barefoot loli is always a good addition. Hope next one is a constantly flying witch that doesn't like shoes.



Author's Response:

A little bit of Enid's nature will be explored in the next chapter, she's a little bit of a mix between the western, more particularly Anglo/Scottish idea of the Cunning Folk (NOT the fey/fairies), and of course the Japanese spirit which is ironically more well known in the US despite our heritage. This is reflected both in her disguise as a western crone style witch, and her true nature as a fox-girl, while her actual abilities are a sort of mix between what both are said to be capable of.

Reviewer: Twerp Signed [Report This]
Date: August 16 2022 6:49 PM Title: The Goddess Awakens

I created an account just so I could gush and say thanks. I'm 45 and have consumed an embarrassing amount of GTS erotica. This is easily one of my favorite reads and I'm eagerly anticipating new chapters. Yes, we're here for the triggers ( feet, size play, domination/ humiliation) and you incorporate these expertly; yet it's everything else that elevates the story into masterpiece material. The world and the characters who inhabit this fantasy domain. Their personalities and interactions with one another. The action and flow of your writing style. Your understanding of the space and it's tropes and your deft weaving of the fetish into this fantastical fabric. What an impressive work of literature thus far. Please make more.



Author's Response:

Thanks! I have plans for more, so don't worry. If you're into fantasy tales I've got a few others in my catalog, both A Diplomatic Mission and Saving the Kingdom for Dummies take place in a fantasy setting, and The Landlady is a Real Witch is a more modern urban fantasy.

Reviewer: Barachiel Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 12 2022 1:43 AM Title: The Goddess Awakens

Excited to see where another one of your amazing works takes us. I really enjoyed the first chapter!

Author's Response:

Thanks, this one is going to be a silly rather than a serious adventure, but it'll be fun I think.

Reviewer: Edgedej4 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: August 11 2022 8:21 AM Title: The Goddess Awakens

Amazing as per usual. I love a fantasy world, especially in this setting. The characters are about what I’d expect too, having their usual character traits. Although I’m not a huge fan of some of them, but that’s just my own personal opinion. Regardless, this is setting up to be another great one. My only criticism would be that, as it’s a fantasy world, a bit more detail would be nice around it.



Author's Response:

I'll try to give a little more info on the area, think of it as a northern forested frontier, lots of mountains, boreal climate, etc.

Reviewer: D W Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 11 2022 2:05 AM Title: The Goddess Awakens

Really nice and entertaining story.  Will be interesting to read where things lead to.



Author's Response:

Thanks, hopefully good places!

Reviewer: CollegialNine Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 10 2022 9:37 PM Title: The Goddess Awakens

An amazing start. I am very much interested in seeing how Vann is going to grapple with the give and take of his newfound power, especially with the likes of Eletha.

That line about the ritual of belittlement makes me hope that Zenovia is potentially eyeing up best elf as a new priest/follower.

Very much looking forward to more.




Author's Response: Zenovia will be taking an interest in her given how often she'll be "helping" Vann out. As for Vann, well spending some time as his friend's tiny plaything seems worth it for magical power, right? Next chapter will explore some more of the "complications" lol.

Reviewer: kenrios Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 10 2022 8:26 PM Title: The Goddess Awakens

Agreed with @DcZ



Author's Response:

Thanks!

Reviewer: DcZ Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 10 2022 7:22 PM Title: The Goddess Awakens

Oh this seems the like start of another good one. 




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Thanks!

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