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Reviewer: UHF Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 26 2022 5:21 AM Title: Captives

This is the best story I have read in years!


There's infinite potential with this one. I also love all the subtle underlying themes.


I just hope you don't get bored with it and forget about it.



Author's Response:

Thanks, glad you're enjoying. Like my other story One Year Lease I did a lot of outlining and notes before starting the story so the path is fairly straightforward and is mostly just putting words to paper. I'm trying to update daily or every other day, should be another one later today actually.

Reviewer: akilmilo Signed [Report This]
Date: July 26 2022 12:07 AM Title: Kindling

Waiting for bounty hunter to culture the princess and show her how to educate someone properly



Author's Response:

Yeah Jolene has ways of putting the shoe on the other foot, with someone in it.

Reviewer: Gerbo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 25 2022 11:38 PM Title: Alliance Day Preparations

Yessssssssss, another chapter. I also wanted to asked a setting question. Did human build their starships by reverse engineering Zetan designs, or were they gifted as part of the original alliance treaty?



Author's Response:

Humans were gifted a lot of technology as part of the alliance, and Zetans helped humans build their own space industry from scratch. Accordingly most, if not all, of human starships are Zetan based, though with a few small changes here and there.

Reviewer: Sg20855 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 25 2022 10:10 PM Title: Captives

Really liking the story and world so far. It's a nice sci fi take on the giantess genre, and I think you've done a great job with the world building and character interactions so far.

I also like the concept of basically Amazon space orcs, but with a slight twist, and specifically the characterizations of the Zetans. 

Interesting to see Kurt's reaction with the princess and her demands/teasing, and his reactions, especially with her feet. Hoping to see more interactions and/or possible forced sweaty foot worship between Kurt and the princess or with other Zetans.

Looking forward reading more, I'm definitely excited for this story. Keep up the good work.



Author's Response: Thanks I'm glad you like the plot and the characters, I put a lot of thought into them before I started charting the world and I'm hoping by the end everyone is happy. The Zetans are, like humans, a lot of things, the Princess obviously believes she's part of a proud warrior race, and when they first made contact with Earth they were definitely not nearly as nice as they are now, and they're not that nice now lol. There will definitely be foot teasing/worship later in the story, Kurt's definitely into all of that even if he doesn't want to surrender to an evil alien princess.

Reviewer: mnirp777 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 25 2022 8:46 PM Title: Alliance Day Preparations

Oh this is so amazingly great!!! I'm completely in love with it and hooked on the story and characters. And what fantastic worldbuilding! You've got the Ursula le Guin touch. :)



Author's Response:

Thanks, I've only read a little bit of Le Guin, but she definitely does a good job making you wonder what's beyond the "window" into the world you're looking through, I try to do that too.

Reviewer: crowtomas Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 25 2022 1:43 PM Title: Captives

I’m invested. 



Author's Response:

Good to hear, your stories are really plot-focused so it's nice to see that this one has your interest!

Reviewer: akilmilo Signed [Report This]
Date: July 25 2022 12:20 PM Title: Alliance Day Preparations

The Idea is quite good but but the race is kinda bad for this.

Smelly 7+ foot  orks with elven ears don't quite work for me. Would be better to see 4 foot unaging girls with extremely high dexterity, experience and intelligence. It would kinda make sense for them to have high advanced technology and cooperate with humans when they aren't brave enough or something like this. This would have a lot of possibilities for reverse play.




Author's Response:

I like amazons, in particular the idea that even when you're full size you're never bigger than them is kind of fun. That said there will be some reversal type stuff with our human bounty hunter character and her Zetan hangers on.

Reviewer: Gerbo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 25 2022 12:39 AM Title: Alliance Day Preparations

What's to say beyond the obvious? Another slam dunk start to another one of your series. 



Author's Response:

Thanks, this one's a pretty ambitious story so I hope it lands with people.

Reviewer: angelus288 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 24 2022 11:21 PM Title: Captives

Nice chapter.


If I was Kurt being stepped on by Princess Nea I would be tempted to say, “joke's on you I’m into that shit”.



Author's Response: Yeah I have a feeling for most of the people who come to a site like this it wouldn't make a good "torture" lol.

Reviewer: Lupin Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 24 2022 10:08 PM Title: Captives

Love that Telmas point of view is getting some development even if she wasnt as extreme as Nea in her distaste for humans, Im excited to see how her relationship with Joey affects her perspective now that hes got his cool back. Also I find myself relating with Kurt especially when he mentioned hed be willing to die for his pride. That hit too close to home for me and its exactly how i felt throughout that scene. Probably not a good thing survivability wise but id wanna go down with some fight in me. Cant wait to see how or if Kurt gets her back!



Author's Response:

It's one thing to say "I'll die before I surrender!" it's a little harder to say "you can squish my best friend too!" Kurt obviously has plenty of fight left in him, even if he feels like he needs to play along for now.

Reviewer: tinyguy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 24 2022 8:22 PM Title: Captives

Being totally honest, the alien giantesses are just not doing it for me, and I doubt I’ll be able to get into the human bounty hunter either.  


Despite that, I’d say this is one of the best chapters I’ve read from you. The plot is so wonderfully written/well thought out that I still found myself wanting to read more. 



If this chapter is  a Preview of how engaging your  future installment/stories will be, I’m all in, smut or no smut.



Author's Response:

Sorry the green skin isn't doing it for you, but if you're here for the plot I think you'll like it!

Reviewer: makebelieve Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 24 2022 7:24 PM Title: Captives

Really good story thus far!



Author's Response:

Thanks!

Reviewer: brett533 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 24 2022 3:30 PM Title: The Rogue Princess

excited for more

Author's Response:

Thanks!

Reviewer: Edgedej4 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 24 2022 8:55 AM Title: The Rogue Princess

In terms of raw narrative complexity, this is definitely the best one you’ve done. With multiple puzzle pieces moving, and it’s all shown to us rather than being explicitly told. Good detail given too, with a nice set up for a classic enemy to lover style arc.


The biggest weakness I’ve found with any space intergalactic stories is the way they’re described usually; it’s hard to translate a picture from an author to the audience, With how these things look. I know it isn’t a focus for this story, but I do think it would be beneficial to have a small segment or to even further extend the description for these things some more. Would go a long way.

But yeah, keep it up. It’s going great.



Author's Response:

I'll do my best to be a bit more descriptive for exotic elements. This one probably is going to be the most complex overall narrative I've done, with a lot of different character viewpoints throughout. Thanks for reading, I hope it lives up to your expectations!

Reviewer: Edgedej4 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: July 24 2022 8:36 AM Title: Alliance Day Preparations

Seems like another story up my alley. And unlike another intergalactic space story you’ve done, it appears this one will be more focused and possibly more cruel. Both of those things I welcome (at least to a degree). I do think a bit more direction was needed in this chapter, provided as an introduction we, the readership, don’t know who’s who. But regardless, I’m excited for another one of your stories. 



Author's Response:

I considered some exposition type paragraphs, but I figured it would be better to jump right in and let the reader fill in the blanks on the world themselves, it's a risky move I guess, hope the rest of the story comes together a little easier for you.

As for cruelty this one will probably go more in that direction than some of my other ones, though a lot of the nastier stuff will be implied or "offscreen" as a plot element, like it should be understood that the Zetans were pretty cruel and downright evil to humans when they first landed, humans are distrustful of them for very good reason even if the new generation has people trying to make up for it.

Reviewer: Divediveburners Signed [Report This]
Date: July 24 2022 5:57 AM Title: The Rogue Princess

This, this may be your masterpiece.

Welcome to Hell was rather fun. I was alright with One-Year Lease. The witch story got a few laughs. But this story is going to get me refreshing the "Most Recent" section of the site everyday. "We help each other get by" has stood the test of time as my favorite of yours, but this story right here may exceed it.

I most definitely appreciate that this is more focused narratively than "The Conquest of Earth." Heck, it even has some of the same archetypes, with the human diplomat, the rugged, rural main character, and a domineering, somewhat condescending race. The Zentans appear to be an amalgamation of the Alemari and the Ghalans, combining both the conquering warlike tendency, with the "make humans pets" belief.

The crux of this, is that Kurt hates Zentans, and Nea wishes to establish dominion over the humans. You've set these two opposing viewpoints on a collision course, with both heading at full speed. I think this is a more compelling conflict than "One year lease" even though that was played out as more as a light-hearted Tom and Jerry dynamic. Unlike Eva, Nea is completely all-in her beliefs, while I felt Eva's were a bit contrived. Perhaps the reason is that Nea defies the authority in her life, her mother's, while Eva tried appealing to the authority in her life, Amber.

Anyways, I look forward to seeing how this will develop.



Author's Response:

I'm glad you're liking it so far. Welcome to Hell and Landlady is a Witch were both intended to be pretty silly stories more about fun and having a laugh than the drama. We Help Each Other Get By is a more dramatic piece but still a relatively calm slice of life type story. I think I've mentioned that when I was brainstorming this one I thought of a Conquest of Earth spinoff, but that universe is just too lighthearted for this kind of story so I decided to start one from scratch. Obviously I like rural main characters, I've got a few floating around. The diplomats I thought would provide some nice framing as well as a look into a happier Zetan-Human relationship.

Glad you're liking it so far, this one should be fun!

Reviewer: BlueDream Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 24 2022 5:53 AM Title: The Rogue Princess

I really like Telma and feel for her. Caught between duty and her clear knowledge that all of this is a bad idea, juggling jobs as bodyguard, infiltrator, abductor and now possibly therapist for panicky little Joey - all in a day's work.

I'm sure she could have, would have said something to Zetan authorities instead of going along with Nea, but headcanon so far says she figures that losing Nea's trust would make it even more difficult to make her understand how wrong she is, and sometimes the best lessons are harsh ones.



Author's Response: Yeah she's stuck between a rock and a hard place, but at the end of the day she can't force the princess to do anything, and she can't exactly abandon her either.

Reviewer: Barachiel Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 24 2022 12:33 AM Title: The Rogue Princess

I really like Nea. Sure she’s a bit of a brat and definitely bigoted, but it seems like she’s had little exposure to humans outside of the guards. Even seeing one that was attractive and defiant had her calling him perfect and taking interest in him. Definitely great so far!

Author's Response:

Nea doesn't know nearly as much about humans, or even Zetans, as she thinks, she's very sheltered and spoiled so she's in for some culture shock.

Reviewer: tinyguy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 23 2022 9:35 PM Title: The Rogue Princess

@DcZ Would also love to see Nea shrink at some point



Not only would it be good plot wise, but would also be a great chance to introduce some size action With a human woman; alien giantesses are usually a little too far out there for me (no pun intended).



With that being said though, love how well written the story is so far. Getting similar vibes to One Year Lease, which is a very good thing!


Keep up the great writing! 



Author's Response:

Can't promise Nea getting small, but we will see a human woman character next chapter. Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: Lupin Signed [Report This]
Date: July 23 2022 6:45 PM Title: The Rogue Princess

Dang you did a pretty good job of making Nea morally reprehensible even moreso than Eve at the start of One Year Lease. Really makes me want to see her suffer some karma even if it takes a bit. I really enjoyed the side story with Adam and Kira even if the past relationship between them is still a bit mysterious. Like why did they split or how do they know each other? Didn't expect another chapter so soon but it's always welcome!



Author's Response:

Kira and Adam's background will be explored a little throughout their plot arc, as for why they split, she got sent back to Zetan Prime for work, now that she's back they're back together again.

I'm going to try to hit the same one a day pace as One Year Lease, we'll see how that one plays out lol.

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