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Reviewer: thoria Signed [Report This]
Date: October 30 2022 8:23 PM Title: Chapter 17: The clash

Every chapter is somehow getting better and better and it was already 10/10 from the first chapters, from the guillotine the guard and when Alvarez was trying to hide in her hiding spot from amber, and the soft vore, so beautiful and creative descriptions i want to keep highlighting things but then i would just copy the entire page lol

so frekkin good!!!😇



Author's Response:

Hahah, thank you! I'm always trying to improve so that's incredible to hear.

And honestly, highlight away. I've taken a lot of inspiration from other authors and it's probably pretty apparent if you read their works 😂

Reviewer: shadowguy015 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 30 2022 11:42 AM Title: Chapter 17: The clash

still hope Jennifer grows



Author's Response:

She juuuuust might.

Nah, but as soon as I post next chapter, I'm creating a poll for an alternative ending. What I post is the cannon ending, but I'll make chapter 18 (and maybe 19) b based on popular demand. So you're going to see two endings either way :p

Statistically, I'm thinking one will be Jennifer no matter what.

Reviewer: vegetaboy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 30 2022 5:23 AM Title: Chapter 17: The clash

I applaud you for not holding back on the violence in this chapter, really shows a realistic (and brutal) portrayal of how far someone with Amber's mindset would go.

When you said she goes full rampage, you did not disappoint. 

The imagery of her chomping off the guards head was very vivid, and the way she tore through the other so easily.

I have to say the Vasquez and Trish tag teaming Amber was great XD

And that final section!!

Ouch..... :( 

Vasquez....

XD (I think I know we're you're going though with Jennifer grabbing the syringe. Vasquez may seem dead, but is probably still alive enough for that dose to heal her and turn her into a gigantic powerhouse of a latina  woman.....well, more so than she already is) Come on Jennifer! inject her and let Vasquez re-take her position as biggest bitch XD

I doubt this is her end, she still needs to put Amber in her place/under her and kill her.  Especially now that Amber stomped on her, she deserves a foot stomping of her own XD

And Smith!!! Ooh, I am on the edge of my seat now just wishing for the next chapter to be here. 

Another very visual/visceral chapter in terms of content, but I am not complaining, you weave the violent acts in so well with the characters, and it all plays out and flows greatly while reading. 

As I said, I can't wait for the next chapter XD (And hopefully Vasquez getting back up, she can't be 'dead dead') 




Author's Response:

Hahaha, man you gave this review fast! Thank you for being so quick on the draw and always interacting with me :D

I won't say any spoilers,  of course, but I can tell you that there's going to be a poll with the next chapter.  You can vote for an alternative ending so if things don't pan out the way you wanted in the cannon,  then you can see another way it can go.

As for Amber and Smith... Let's see what happens when they come together. Will he survive her?

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