[Report This]Date: June 03 2022 1:20 AM Title: Chapter 1
Love the story!!! The concept is great, and totally underutilized by writers here and elsewhere.
I myself have a few similar stories at "Ekay's Portal" { https://aryion.com/g4/view/622270 } under the pen name HERToering { HER Toe ring, you'd be surprised at how many people think it means HURT oring }.
Hopefully you continue the story, with Percy and Angie the fishes, and Nibbles the gerbil surviving for much longer than Evelyn planned for. Perhaps even days { I read an account of a woman who swallowed a small turtle and she felt it moving around in her stomach beneath her left breast for a day before she ate a bunch of food to move it along. FYI, she did not notice its remains coming out }.
The thought of Evelyn going after Bethany's cats is pretty hot { as you would note from the stories I posted at "Ekay's Portal" }, I do hope you continue this great story.
You do have a few grammatical errors, but nothing worthy of note. Keep up the terrific work.
Author's Response:
Oh I'd missed your stories on Eka's portal, I just started watching you over there. There aren't many writers who experiment with feral prey so it's fun to see your content too.
And yeah there's plans for a sequel, although with my lengthy queue it might take me a while before I can get to it. It should be longer than the first so there will be space to cover a digestion arc if the commissioner wants it, I'm just not sure if they're into that (we haven't discussed the details yet).
And thanks again for the lovely review <3