Date: June 03 2022 11:13 AM Title: Chapter 1- The Secret of Fortress Pip Ash
Your introduction has truly established the ultimate goal of a good work of fiction, which is to let the readers see the events.
I would imagine that the next chapter would be more challenging to write, as the test is to describe a photographic depiction of each character. It’s easier said than done, as many novices would like to describe a giantess with awfully big bosoms. To me, that’s silly and distasteful, as that would denote that a lady with small breasts is off-putting.
Another important note is to give the protagonists realistic motivations, that can be tailored and revised consequently. For example, in my story, I consented to be shrank because in exchange for the usage of the Nano Intelligent Cells to cure Jessica’s illness. Subsequently, my motivation revised to become accustomed to the way of life of being a tiny.