Date: May 31 2022 12:58 PM Title: Recruitment Drive
Maybe next you can have a queen from an allied nation come to visit after hearing of the king’s plight. However, this queen is obsessed with shrunken people and is trying to seduce the king, which makes the harpy (and other potential love interests) jealous, and try to seduce him harder. That seems like it could be interesting.
Author's Response:
Sounds like it would make a good idea for a sequel story, a buxom and pushy queen shows up and starts demanding a "marriage alliance," I'll have to think on it.
[Report This]Date: May 30 2022 8:36 PM Title: Recruitment Drive
Hi Greenmon. I congratulate you, you have the ability to create wonderful and truly unique characters. The story so far, impeccable. They are very good ideas.I would like to ask if there is a possibility to incorporate dragon girls into your story or nekos. When I say dragon girls I mean giant girls but with draconic characteristics. For example dragon tails, claws or scales in some places but his torso and face are human. And if you also add a naive or playful personality, with that unique touch that you give to each character, I think it would be wonderful. Thank you for sharing this great story with us. Keep it up
Author's Response: I don't think it's much of a spoiler at this point but the dragon mentioned so far is in fact a dragon-girl with features much like you described. As for nekos, not sure they fit this setting, but my other story Conquest of Earth has a lot of giant catgirls with very playful personalities, if that's your thing.
[Report This]Date: May 30 2022 7:44 PM Title: Recruitment Drive
I have to admit, while I liked Al from the first chapter, there was something I felt was missing. It's nothing specific, or anything that I could give a name to, but even though I was rooting for him, I couldn't quite place him at the level of Jake, Jim or even Aaron.
Now, after how he dealt with the bandits, and Meghan, I am fully on Team Alfred. He probably needed time to marinate, that's all.
Admittedly, I'm not as a big fan of Cyrene, although I would not say this is inherent to flaws in the story. The "playful" archetype in my opinion tends to be a tad dull, strangely enough. You made full use of that, once more, when she was attacking the Bandit camp. She's used to her full potential, you see to that, but once more, not entirely my cup of tea.
No, my cup of tea is Morwen. In fact, I believe in Morwen supremacy. It's endearing how much she cares for her brother. There's a story behind her scars, that you give bits of from her brother, but not entirely, which is my favorite sort of story telling trick. Since Alfred appears to be betrothed to Cyrene, and it's a rather endearing prospect, I do wonder what your plans are for Morwen.
Excellent as always.
Author's Response: Good king Al is a protagonist type I'm trying out that I haven't done before, he's meant to be more of a planner or diplomat type, a bit sarcastic, while not a coward he's not nearly as brave the guys I usually write and definitely not a fighter. As you've noted guys in my stories tend to pick up a harem. Morwen will definitely be hanging around, as will her brother, and the next part will flesh out more of their backstory and why the ended up becoming outlaws in the first place.