[Report This]Date: July 16 2022 2:05 AM Title: Chapter 5: Night Watch
I think my favorite part of this story has been the worldbuilding. The way we naturally and gradually learn about their world has been nothing short of great and keeps me entertained despite the relatively low action. Right now the only thing I think could use some clearing up is just how secretive Super society is from a Natural perspective, especially regarding the detective and his daughter, as I assumed they knew about Steve being a student from the academy, but his reaction at the end of Chapter 5 makes me doubt that assumption.
Anyways! Keep up the good work, and I look forward to more!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the comment, Babulbi. I'm glad you feel the level of detail is working. When there's a lot of worldbuilding it's hard to know how much to explain without exposition dumping, which I really want to try an avoid.
Most Supers are fairly covert. Brandon and Tori guessed Steve was a student, the stuff in Ch 5 about the secret basement and AI, etc, is not related to the academy. That's a personal project of Steve's and Tripp's (which Tripp abandoned), so Brandon and Tori didn't know about it.
[Report This]Date: July 14 2022 11:46 AM Title: Chapter 5: Night Watch
You're probably my fav writer on the site rn. Everything you write is super good and natural especially. All character interactions I read just feel so realistic.
Why did Zamira assume Steve could make himself bigger again? Can Reducers who can reduce themselves do that?
Author's Response:
Thanks for the kind review, Iunno, I really appreciate it.
Reducers can 'unreduce' themselves but not others.
The rules sound really strange and confusing; I was using some odd metaphors to 'ground' how powers worked generally. For instance, if someone had the Human Torch's ability to combust, they could also extinguish themselves without being burned. But if they touched another, that person would burn and the Human Torch could not extinguish them the same way. The person would have to be extinguished externally, like with water. It's like using your powers through the medium of your own body is different to using your powers on others. So a reducer can reduce themselves and 'cancel' the power to grow back, but they can't grow back another.
I'll try to edit somewhere to clear this up in the story.