[Report This]Date: June 09 2022 9:09 AM Title: Chapter 1: Exam Night
This was plain great. I've been having a resurging interest in superheroes since I started looking into Mutants and Masterminds, so this hit me just right. The characterization and worldbuilding were great, and my only nitpick would be that what happened in a scene was sometimes lost, although that is partly due to our narrator feeling differently from what he actually does. An example would be Venus' entrance, where, while I did get Rodney died, I remained unsure about Lucy for quite a while.
Looking forward to more.
Author's Response:
Thanks for your comment, Babulbi, I'm glad you like the story so far. You raise a valid point about some details not being clear. The scene is meant to be a little disconcerting and confusing, even freakish, and the characters aren't acting their usual selves. Later chapters will hopefully clear some of this up.