Date: May 30 2022 2:29 AM Title: Chapter 8. The Powers.
Ok, Jennifer is a witch with the powers of Satan behind her; but Satan was cast out of heaven by God simply by God raising his hands. Then God sent the arch angel Michele to defeat Satan and cast him and his fellow rebellious angels {i.e. demons} into hell with Beelzebub. So Jennifer and Satan are already on the loosing side.
Did you know, an ancient belief / text tells that Lucifer, an arch angel, loved God so much that he / she / it (?) took on the roll of evil incarnate to test humanities devotion to God at God's request? That Lucifer turned evil simply to serve God as the bad guy {i.e. ASSHOLE PIECE OF SHIT} in order to serve God and show God his love.
Now I'm no theologian; but my money is on God and that of Good.
You seem to eager to write this and your last chapter, often repeating yourself needlessly. My suggestion, write out your chapter, then wait a day to post it after you have proof read it.
Any chance of guys ending up in giantess butt-crack again?
Date: May 17 2022 5:50 PM Title: Chapter 1. Lindsey heads out.
Is that a kid in that picture, what the fuck
Author's Response:
Nope.
Date: May 13 2022 1:38 AM Title: Chapter 5. Jennifer more powerful now.
WOW! Just WOW! GIANTESS'S Galore! Only question is who is the ultimate Giantess? My hope is the gorgeous hottie Megan Lloyd; but I would not complain if that ULTRA HOT BABE Sarah Cannady grew to 700' as well.
It seems the only one who is NOT a Giantess yet should be is Jennifer Holt.
In chapter 4, Jennifer mentions other so called "rapists and abusers" for Kayla to go after while searching for Jerry; did Kayla find them in the city and if she did, where is she keeping them?
Author's Response:
Jennifer Holt will not be a giantess, but her true nature will be revealed in the next couple of chapters. Kayla knew where the so called rapists and abusers were and she knew that Jennifer was falsely accusing them. She acted like she was trying to find them.
[Report This]Date: May 07 2022 1:50 AM Title: Chapter 3. New Girl
I love how your story varies so much it's pretty much impossible to predict. You keep all of us readers guessing.
Kayla Kirk looks psychotic in the image you provided, which is quite provocative. She looks like a woman who would think nothing of smashing or humiliating somebody else; even if being misguided to do so.
Very much looking forward to the next chapter(s).
[Report This]Date: May 05 2022 1:34 AM Title: Chapter 2. Catching Jennifer
Wait, looking at the image of Lindsey's face and her ass flexing {nice fix on that image by the way, that gorgeous ass flexing is hot as hell}, is Jennifer "really" being "punished"? Seems like more of a reward. {That was a joke, but seriously???}
I like how Charles realized he was lied to and stepped away. Probably a precursor to how the residents of the town of Claymore will feel towards Jennifer's hurtful and false accusations.
You did a great job of cleaning up your paragraphs, thank you, and I'm sure your other readers appreciate it also.
My only other issue, and I make this mistake a lot myself, give a quick proofread of your chapter before you post it. Reread this and ask yourself, is this what I meant to write: Anouther student replied, "YeahI heard that she has been flexing ever since she got here and she has not. Sure is a turn-on for me, oh gosh."
Did you mean to write "Yeah, I heard...." and "she has not stopped."?
Hey, I'm not the grammar police; but your readers will greatly appreciate a story that does not require them to stop reading, take a pause, and figure out what you meant. Believe me, I make mistakes too and I am only trying to help out a fellow writer.
For the record, your story is not what I was expecting, it is actually much better. Keep up the terrific work.
Any more images of Lindsey, especially of her pretty face and gorgeous ass would be greatly appreciated. What a hot Giantess!!!
Author's Response:
Why thank you for the nice comment. The tights that Lindsey has on in the picture, is one of her favorites to wear (not in public ) There is a story in I could tell that happened while she was wearing those tights.
[Report This]Date: May 04 2022 1:57 AM Title: Chapter 1. Lindsey heads out.
Nice story, and who wouldn't want Lindsey Horvath as an 80' Giantess? She's quite the hot cutie.
Your story line is very interesting. My only complaint is your use of run on subjects in long paragraphs. You have multiple people speaking, all in the same paragraph; which makes them slightly confusing and overly long.
Separate the subject matter into smaller paragraphs and your story will flow much more easily.
One has to wonder if Lindsey will find Jennifer, and more importantly put that giantess ass of hers to use on Jennifer or others?
Author's Response:
Thank you for the nice comment and the advice. I will try to the the next chapter that way.