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Reviewer: danielring Signed [Report This]
Date: February 06 2014 12:15 PM Title: Chapter 1

too bad its pure fiction, would love to meet her in reallity :)

Reviewer: modelmrs Signed [Report This]
Date: January 05 2010 8:58 PM Title: Chapter 1

An interesting piece. I note there is an author called Adeline on the forum. Is she whom you write about?
What is she like?

Reviewer: amanda Signed [Report This]
Date: September 18 2009 11:38 AM Title: Chapter 1

wow this is a very intersting story i did enjoy reading it you are very good at describing his fate i was turned on by your detail on how she used him right up to his inevitable end,i hope you write story another soon.


Reviewer: eatme please Signed [Report This]
Date: May 04 2009 6:57 AM Title: Chapter 1

Thank you for your comments,i always use Microsoft office when writing and Auto Correction is always set to on it does correct most errors when compiling a story.

Reviewer: banfield Signed [Report This]
Date: May 04 2009 5:45 AM Title: Chapter 1

Well, 'eatmeplease, this is an old yarn I've met before and found it very good. I enjoyed reading it again and also enjoyed correcting the many grammatical errors such as punctuations - full-stops, comas, semi-colons, capital letters for names and separating paragraphs.

It was like correcting schoolbys' essays and homework.

Anyway, it IS a good yarn, and I'm giving you 7 out of 10 for trying.




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