Date: September 18 2009 11:38 AM Title: Chapter 1
wow this is a very intersting story i did enjoy reading it you are very good at describing his fate i was turned on by your detail on how she used him right up to his inevitable end,i hope you write story another soon.
Date: May 04 2009 5:45 AM Title: Chapter 1
Well, 'eatmeplease, this is an old yarn I've met before and found it very good. I enjoyed reading it again and also enjoyed correcting the many grammatical errors such as punctuations - full-stops, comas, semi-colons, capital letters for names and separating paragraphs.
It was like correcting schoolbys' essays and homework.
Anyway, it IS a good yarn, and I'm giving you 7 out of 10 for trying.