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Reviewer: D W Signed [Report This]
Date: November 28 2021 3:49 AM Title: Chapter 4: Let The Fun Begin

I didn't see Mike's end coming.  Then again, does Megan truly care?

Will Megan come to realize she is stomping her classmates out of existence; that they are both bug sized yet her classmates?

Aren't there more classmates still alive and hiding from Megan?  Where is Professor Whitaker in all this?  Does she know what is going on?  Did she plan it?  Does Professor Whitaker have any control over what is happening?

Like where this is going; especially if Megan were to find out she stepped on and crush her classmates.

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 25 2021 7:51 AM Title: Chapter 2: An Empty Room

Wow, what a start. I always love the classroom setting. It creates many giantess opportunities. 

Kinda cool how she thinks they are ants. It also gives me a good idea of how small they are. 

Looks like the fun is just getting started so I can’t wait for the next chapter! 

Author's Response:

Thank you so much for the feedback! Things will definitely get more exciting soon for the main character and our tiny friends!

Reviewer: D W Signed [Report This]
Date: November 25 2021 2:26 AM Title: Chapter 2: An Empty Room

For a first posting BRAVO!

You have a few grammatical errors {we all do}.  My suggestion is to step away from what you write for a few minutes, then come back and proof read it.  That little bit of time away will clear your mind so that when you reread it a second time you will be able to pick out those little errors.

As to content, you have quite the winner here.  Rather than write a simple "crush" story you added depth and context with Meghan arguing with Hannah over both girls liking Jack.

You also keep emphasizing that the device is not done and no one except for the professor knows what it can do; yet something {"The Incident"} occurred.  That fact really adds interest as to what really happened and was it the intended result of the final product.

I really look forward to the next chapter(s) of this story and more of your work.  Very well done!

Author's Response:

WOW! Thank you so much for the feedback. I really appreciaite the time you took to give me detailed pointers and advice. Also, I am very glad you enjoyed the first two chapters! I can't wait to hear what everyone has to say when things get a little more...exciting. Thanks again. 

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