[Report This]Date: October 12 2021 12:53 AM Title: Preface
I like the preface, as you offered a concise clarification of the scope and intention of the story.
Author's Response:
I'm glad the synopsis hit well! The main difficulty for me was keeping it short enough as not to turn people away, but verbose enough to include the setup, scope, intention etc.
[Report This]Date: October 10 2021 7:46 PM Title: Preface
I had the pleasure of reading an early copy of this story for editing and review. I must say that I adore the story and worldbuilding. There is so much here to explore with the Arpakies and characters that I really want to see more in this universe. I think that for more emotional impact (and more smut), a longer story needs to be told. I'm excited to see where this one will go, and I'm happy to have been given a chance to add my own input prior to the release. You have a good grasp of storywriting, and I think the scene with Arto is well done. I will be looking forward to more chapters, and I'm always willing to chip in my two cents if you'd like a review.
Keep it up, the possibilities you have here are endless and I'm sure you will bring some interesting perspectives to the genre.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for your comprehensive critique and admiration! I hope I can continue to meet expectations, and turn this story into something really special!