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Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 17 2021 12:23 PM Title: Chapter 40: Skyros Part 3: The Blue Room

I notice you didn't specify whether the high heels were candy-striped or resembled pale pink kittens.  Which makes me half-expect that they'll belong to a third party.  And with Jerry's luck, that's liable to be the blonde party girl from the VIP Lounge!  But, to paraphrase Glinda the Good Witch:

"Is that a good thing...or a bad thing?"




Author's Response:

Thanks for noticing, Carycomic. I realize this comment was a little while ago, but I only just noticed some errors in the Skyros chapters regarding Zo's descriptions. So, if it was confusing, that was my fault! It said her hair was red, then ebony, then red again, and her heels were candy striped, then magenta. Details were changed but not edited consistently. Zo's hair is supposed to be ebony, not red and her heels are candy-striped, not magenta. It's also probably not very clear in the story, but the kitten heels belong to Zo's friend Hannah. 

With all these discrepancies, it's amazing that Jerry was able to physically identify her in the club at all! I sure made it hard for him (and the reader) anyway!

Next time I post an update I will fix this.

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