[Report This]Date: April 14 2022 8:08 PM Title: Sisterly Ties
This story really is superb! The writing style is very fluent and there seems to be a natural flow between the characters. You have a nice way of describing the scenery, giving enough detail to make the characters, rooms, situations, appearances, traits, etc. with enough detail to make them alive, but leave room for imagination and a better flow of the story.
I also enjoy the relative realism in the characters. Most stories just have one socio-psychopathic giantess with no remorse or character and a tiny with equally little character who is there either just to hate it and die or to somehow completely enjoy it (and die). Chris seems realistic as a person who has a shrinking fetish in that he would both somewhat enjoy it and be terrified simultaneously - which is probably how I would react lol. Alexis seems like a very interesting character as well, with the same realism attached. I can imagine someone who gets a kick from shrinking people not suddenly turning into an uncaring murderer, but still having their morality and ethics severely challenged by the sudden opportunity. Celia does come across as a meanie, but that honestly wouldn't even be a bad thing. I think that can still be great and offer some variation and a genuinely nervous reading experience, as I've gotten invested in Chris' character and him being with a possible psycho can really spice thing up!
One point of feedback I would like to leave with. I think you're writing works really well with extended scenery and character interaction, and I think longer chapters could help with that. The flow of the story is one of this story's main strengths and the longer the chapter is, the better I think the flow would be.
Keep it up! This is def one of my favorite stories on the site atm, and one of the main reasons I keep returning. Also, as someone who recently moved away from a hotspot city center, I can confirm that I am indeed a witch..
Author's Response:
I absolutely love the feedback! I've read this back a few times now and I'm all giddy that you took the time to give such thorough feedback! Thank you so much for recognizing all the effort I've put into writing recently ;_;
I've been really working to both leave some to the imagination, but also provide a fair amount of details, setting the scene and flow. Its been a lot of work to try and strike that balance, but I really think I'm getting better at it as I go! c:
I completely agree! I think longer chapters would really help things, and I'm going to work on putting out longer releases!
Thanks so much for leaving this piece of feedback, absolutely just made my week! I'm so glad to hear my stories are one of the main reasons you and a few others seem to check out this site. Couldn't ask for higher praise <3