Reviewer: kenrios Signed [Report This]
Date: December 12 2021 12:24 AM Title: Chapter 1 - The Girl in the Yellow Frock

I personally would like Henry and Ada to be in different terms. Basically, if Henry wanted to be with Ada, it was of his own free will. Slavery, while pleasant for Henry at first, will begin to dent his soul in the long run and when Ada no longer wants it she will dispose of him as a piece of trash. At that point I would like Henry to have the opportunity to leave if he wanted to. But knowing Ada, I don't have many illusions. Maybe that's why I didn't like that Henry lost to Ada, but not everything can be the bed of roses in a story on this site, right? What I would like is for Henry at some point to start fighting for his freedom before it's too late. Personally, I would not like this character to have a tragic ending even if it brings him pleasure. He seems too good a person to end up like this. That would be too cruel. I believe that life is not something so trivial as to dismiss it like that.

Reviewer: hadumba Signed [Report This]
Date: June 24 2021 7:20 PM Title: Chapter 1 - The Girl in the Yellow Frock

It's all fun and games until you gauge someones eyes. Great read, I really like your world with cartoon physics, helps alot with just focusing on the characters.