Reviewer: Foxinbox Signed [Report This]
Date: May 24 2021 7:22 PM Title: One-on-One

Oh, shit I realize when in my last review I wrote Cass when I meant Cathy lol my bad, and then I read this chapter and I was so confused when Cass set up dinner reservations for Jen and Luara thinking it was Cathy lol. This whole chapter was great and Elizebeth confronting Laura was wildly cathartic even if it made me a smidge sad for Laura. I can only imagine when Brain confronts her, I get shivers. When Jen mentioned Brians sexuality it put the biggest smile on my face, like I should have been expecting she’d know since they’re so close but it was still caught me off guard in the best of ways.

Author's Response:

I figured that you probably meant Cathy! No worries, and you're definitely right - Jen finding out about what she did is a recipe for disaster.

I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter, and Elizabeth's confrontation. I hope Brian's meeting with her doesn't disappoint, it'll be pretty intense. 

I'm also glad you liked Jen's mention of Brian's sexuality! I thought that was a good way to show how close they are, so I'm glad it came through for you. It made me smile to write, as well.

Thanks for the review, and I hope you enjoy the next chapter! It'll come out pretty soon, maybe even today.

-Pluto

Reviewer: sandman579 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 24 2021 9:59 AM Title: One-on-One

Ugh, make it a one and done please: "I accept your apology. No I don't forgive you. Please stop trying to see me. Why?! Jen it's time you learned what mom said to me the last time she ever saw me as a normal boy". Jen should probably be included in the next meeting, even if learning what Laura said damages her newly built relationship with her mother it would otherwise leave her confused and not understanding of why Brian wants nothing to do with her. It's just going to build up friction between him and Jen if she keeps going about things and pressures Brian into talking with their mother more without realizing just how badly Laura damaged him mentally. Plus I really just can't see all of the girls being able to control their slapping urges with Laura in the same room as Brian with practically anything she says (or reveals) bound to set one of them off and it'll feel so good for one of them to hit her on Brian's behalf.

I'm curious if Senator Day is spending the expensive lunch date with the Bentley women, more as a political ploy then anything. The senator who cleared Brian Bentley's name is having lunch with his family at an upscale restaurant, but where's Brian the media asks? They'll try to flood Jen as they arrive or leave, "Hapy birthday Jen. It must be a great day knowing your brother is innocent and alive. Tell us, have you seen him, where is he?" I suspect Senator Day is playing up the media to further her name recognition. Actually helping Brian and the girls is just a side favor. We're ticking down to her ultimate power move where she presents the "miracle" of discovering shrinking can be reversed.

On the alternative topics, I'm wondering if SPAR has already been cancelled/postponed. It was kind of mind-boggling to learn Allie has killed 256 people in under a year as a Chevalier. Considering if the Silver Strip has some dozen+ Chevaliers, a daily session each means it's not absurd to claim 10,000+ people have been executed there in recent years. Even if there's single digit numbers of SPAR facilities, the cracks are starting to show. Did this alternate USA really have an epidemic of mass murderers, since Brian was exclusively the first single victim murderer to be sent there.

And going back to my early theories, all Chevaliers are tested and guranteed to pass pyschopath tests, Allie being the exception since she got swept in with Elizabeth's meddling. I'm still curious about what the government intends to do with SPAR agents. Public opinion was already leery of them, Allie's family disowned her for becoming one. Brian won't be the first case of a victim of falsified justice under scrutiny. If the government fails to hide chevalier identities, a handful of people are going to be blasted on the media as the scapegoats of the judicial systems injustice. I'm really curious if Cathy tries to reach out to Allie again, if she'll express guilt and remorse about hurting Brian. Cathy also hinted that Chevaliers might've made a black market in shrink victims. She claimed to have brought victims home and alive from her sessions before. I'm curious if this gets confirmed and exposed before the stories end.

Author's Response:

Thanks for the review! As always, appreciate your thoughts and theories. I hope you enjoy how their meeting proceeds.

I probably should have written it to be more clear, but Senator Day isn't actually at the restaurant with Jennifer and Laura, she just set up the dinner reservation for them. It really was a kindhearted gesture towards Brian, no greater meaning. As for everything else, you'll find out eventually. Hope you enjoy it!

-Pluto