[Report This]Date: May 14 2009 2:30 PM Title: Making amends
And, that's probably exactly what she wants...IT!*
*Nudge-nudge/wink-wink!
Author's Response: lol im trying to keep this rating at PG
Date: May 14 2009 12:23 PM Title: Getting to know her
Wow, thanks for adding the next chapter so quickly. I was sure you were going to leave us hanging for a while.
There's a lot to like in this chapter. The thing that sticks out to me, though, is how you convey the characters' feelings with actions instead of just words. This is difficult to do, but you pull it off quite well. Hell, even when the characters are in dialog, there's meaning behind their words. Very well done.
It was nice to see Bobby stabilze his relationships all around. He's way to stressed out to be isolated. I'm curious to see what tactic he employs to find out Jen's brithday wish.
Please keep up the good work.
[Report This]Date: May 14 2009 12:17 AM Title: Making amends
Am happy that they made up. But i would like to know what she wants. Jen has a lot that she not telling.
[Report This]Date: May 13 2009 3:04 PM Title: My little mistake
I know that Jen's discovery, by other big people, was only a matter of time. But, part of me can't help feeling that this incident _is_ Sarah's fault. I mean, curiosity killed the cat, right?
Well, at the risk of sounding like a male sexist pig: I can't imagine anything cattier than a curious female!
*Let the verbal brickbats commence*
Date: May 13 2009 12:54 PM Title: My little mistake
I'm lovin' the melodrama on display in this chapter. It fits Bobby's character so well, and Jen's reaction to being discovered is intensely believable and perhaps a bit inciteful. You also did a masterful job with Sara's progression through the scene.
The dream sequence was pretty cool, too. I like how Bobby's confused emotions haunt him even in his sleep.
Bobby is so smooth, by the way...
"So...what's her name?"
"I don't know."
Priceless.
[Report This]Date: May 12 2009 2:27 AM Title: Night at Avery Point
I love reading this story so much. I don't see to many stories that have the girl being the one that is small.
You been doing a very good job on this story. This chapter was very cute to read. Keep up the good work.
Date: May 11 2009 2:02 PM Title: A fairy tale
Man, this is a great story.
Your writing has a unique charm about it; it just draws me in. The characters really come to life. I'm really interested not only in what becomes of them, but of what they're thinking along the way as well.
You're killing me with this mystery stuff, though. I just have to know Jen's little secret. You've set it up quite well, regardless of what it turns out to be.
Again, this is an awesome story, and I'm eager to see where you're going with it.
Author's Response: thank you very much, glad you've enjoyed it
[Report This]Date: May 11 2009 1:34 PM Title: Night at Avery Point
Real nice! :-)
Thanks for finally posting a new chapter.
Author's Response: thanks for being a loyal follower of this story :), i got much more to come
[Report This]Date: March 23 2009 8:55 AM Title: Hardly just another day
And, on top of everything else, still no birthday present. Heh!
[Report This]Date: November 16 2008 2:08 PM Title: My little sleepover
Hmmm! Maybe he could get her some heart-shaped candy mints. You know; like the kind that say "I Luv U?"
[Report This]Date: November 16 2008 12:13 AM Title: My little sleepover
A very cute and sweet chapter. Jen is so cool and very cute. Keep up the good work.
[Report This]Date: November 11 2008 9:27 PM Title: Lost and found
Dam Bobby's friends just don't know when to leave him alone.
[Report This]Date: November 11 2008 8:56 PM Title: Lost and found
This chapter actually came close to bringing tears to my eyes. Bravo!
[Report This]Date: November 09 2008 1:24 PM Title: Exploration Begins
Heh-heh! Nice to see you adapted my earlier joke. But, on a slightly more serious note? I beginning to wonder if it might not be better for Jen (while she's still hidden) to hear Bob and Sara argue about his new girlfriend.
It might melt a little more of the ice between them (Bob and Jen, I mean)!
[Report This]Date: November 08 2008 12:08 PM Title: My lunch with Jen
Heh! The moment I think stuff like that, just the opposite happens. Oh, well! Maybe you can give him better luck.
Or, failing that, have him actually buy some teabags, this go-round. ;-)
[Report This]Date: November 07 2008 8:36 PM Title: My lunch with Jen
Aww, such a very cute chapter. Very good work.
[Report This]Date: November 06 2008 10:48 PM Title: Opportunity knocks
wow, you are an excellent writer. The plot and structure of this story is fantastic. You have me hooked on what is gonna happen between Jen and Jason.
[Report This]Date: November 05 2008 10:05 AM Title: Opportunity knocks
This is getting good! I just hope Bob can follow through on his admission to Jen that he loves her.
Date: November 03 2008 2:58 PM Title: A fairy tale
Come on, I need more to read. Awesome Story so far, keep it up.
[Report This]Date: November 02 2008 1:34 PM Title: Doubts and denial
Poor Bob! He has got it SO bad for Jen. Let's hope he can get his tongue un-tied by chapter 6.