[Report This]Date: October 14 2021 5:05 PM Title: A Weekend Alone: Eva
Holy crap. I think this was one of the most expertly written chapters I've ever read in quite a while. Keep up the good work!
[Report This]Date: September 06 2021 9:34 PM Title: A Weekend Alone: Eva
Interesting that potentially "Dana" goes in the breakroom after hours on a Friday and ends up over Eva. Since Eva has no way to tell time and no way to see the infinite room around her, we're left wondering if its before or after the "cop" goes to visit Tina as well as if its Dana at all.
I also wonder if Dana would get the police involved as finding a shrunken Eva that way would sink the company. Headlines in the news would be "Big Tech Company Shrinks and Tortures Ex-Employee with New Device. Could You or Your Loved Ones Be Next?"
I hope Dana is looking for Eva and just being careful because Tina is unhinged and probably dangerous if she gets backed in a corner. Despite Eva's attitude, Dana is her friend.
I've not hated a character more than Tina and Amy since Joffrey Baratheon. I hope the next couple of chapters have Karma come calling for them.
#FreeEva
I also, kind of agree with Barrowman, but only a little. As written, I feel like there's no way Amy could have assured Tina that the device would be able to restore Eva considering that Amy was surprised it even worked at all on a person. On top of that, she's currently part plant and part human. She needs food, water and sunlight to survive. There's no way Amy could have been confident that without those things for a weekend, Eva wouldn't just die. As it is, she came very close.
But, that's about as far as I agree. Tina's insane. From her perspective, this was a logical course of action. I see Tina's dialogue as trying to put a brave face on for Eva to show that Tina is in control when even exhausted and mentally fractured Eva could see the truth on her face. Not that I think she was in any state of mind to think more than surface level about it anymore.
I guess only Time can tell how this story ends. We only experience it from the perspective of 2 very unreliable narrators. One that is size and therefore perspective impaired and the other that is mentally ill.
Date: September 05 2021 11:20 AM Title: A Weekend Alone: Eva
So now we know what becomes of Eva. I think it's a testament to her strength that she isn't in even worse shape after a weekend of solitary confinement. But what becomes of Tina? I see two ways this can go:
1) No one discovers Eva and finds out Tina's been doing, even though Tina has clear flaws, in that she'll do worse things than Eva ever did, and that her child-like mind is easily manipulated by people who put on a friendly facade. If this happened, then the story would end with the message that you can have all those flaws and win without doing anything about them.
2) Tina's exposed, by Dana and/or the police. The story would establish that Tina has her own major problems, and was brought down by them.
3) Tina has her own transformation at the last minute, and gets Dana and the police off her trail.
From what I've seen of the story so far, 1) seems like the least likely, and 3) seems contrived and rushed. 2) is the most consistent with what I've read.
[Report This]Date: September 03 2021 8:42 PM Title: A Weekend Alone: Eva
This chapter is very disappointing and it looks like you want to end the story quickly. I had that feeling when the shrinking-to-atomic-chapter was so short and out of place.
These easy find solution and reactions and pacing feel completely out of place with what came before. The level of detail was enjoyable back than.
The logistics, reactions feel very forced. I don't feel the impact of this weekend ordeal and also not the consequences. This is an extreme action and it is handled as if she only was sent into the naugthy corner and ease which by she just is grown back is awful.
Throughout the whole story, actions had consequences for all parties, but now its just easy to do anything with the device.
Author's Response:
You made a lot of assumptions about how the technology worked. The simple fact is why would Tina shrink someone to a nano scale if there was no way to reverse? Especially when it was emphasized that she consulted an expert on the subject beforehand to see if it could work? And you seem to be underestimating just what pure, absolute isolation can do to a person. I wouldn't call any of this fast faced when this is part of the culmination of over two dozen chapters already.
That said, I'm sorry if you didn't enjoy it. Can only hope further chapters suit you better.