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Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed [Report This]
Date: July 17 2021 7:21 PM Title: Cause for Celebration

That shakes things up rather nicely. I hadn't thought that Amy would join Tina in this way, but it fits. Now that leaves a few questions:

1) What would Dana and the rest of the office think? Presumably it still needs to be kept secret from them. The more people know, the more points of failure, but Amy's in a position to deal with evidence in the lab.

2) What's Amy going to do with Eva? And what's she going to do now that she knows that humans can be safely shrunk?

3) What other progress has Amy been making in the lab?

4) How is Amy going to use this data? She can't tell the other scientists about any measurements or observations she makes about Eva without tipping them off that a human's been shrunk. She could, though, use the data to plan experiments that will provide data that isn't directly linked to Eva.

5) What happens when the police investigate Eva's disappearance and interview Tina and Amy?

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 16 2021 8:20 PM Title: Cause for Celebration

This is interesting and I got a feeling Amy would know, or at least a second person.
I hope the journey keeps getting interesting with lot of details and still that every action has consequences. Torture from 2 makes it more interesting, and I still hope that you keep putting much thought behind every action.

I once saw a good story, with a good premise, but at some point all 5 characters suddenly turned into the same person and tortured the smaller person in the same way, same passion and always in agreement with eachother on everything. Their unique individual personalities were gone. So many writers fall into that trap and mindless repetitive torture for 12 chapters with no advancement.

But so far so good. So much detail, emotion and that every action sets a lot of things in motion.

Thanks again, Asterix. 80 percent of the stories on this site are cheap crap with onrealistic transitions and characters. You really have to look good to find goed shrinking, growing or size difference stories.

Looking forward to the next chapter. :)

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