[Report This]Date: June 12 2021 12:28 PM Title: Home Invasion
Very good writing again.
Very good with the psychological details.
There is so much more going on than simple humiliation.
Both characters work well of eachother.
The balance in this story is very good.
Your timing from subtle humialiation to something harder and the constant thoughts of each character makes this a real treat.
Tina really struggles in very interesting detail how to properly dish out justice, punishment or revenge.
Eva only partly breaks and not in a fast enough pace which forces Tina to take more drastic measures. Part of it she finds fun, but some borders she crosses reluctantly.
The visiting of Eva's house is brilliant.
Eva has shown at some point she broke, but you can see it is not at the exact level of breaking Tina want.
Tina has to walk on a small cord to get her exact satisfaction throughout the whole process.
I love the hints you leave behind in the so many details and even the smallest little details. Very enjoyable.
Eva will maybe loose more of her sanity as the physical abuse and isolation/boredom continues and will therefor slowly give in more and more to the simple demands without getting mad, only figthing against the more extremer abuse trying to manage it.
Tina's mental state is also on the line as Eva's exact behavior we have seen from her as a tiny, is putting Tina off. Not getting the expected satisfaction she forces herself to go more extreme not to loose face against Eva.
I cannot put it in exact words, but Eva, not intentional, is dealing serious mental blows to Tina. Eva stubborness forces Tina to be a much bigger bully and the longer this goes on the more Tina will cross borders. This fact doesn't sit well with Tina.
I wonder what the end result will be for both of them after this intimite journey. This is a story of very many details. Change only a few of them and you have a different story.
A story like this takes a lot of effort to get the desired balance in this story.
Apologies, I see I'm repeating my self sometimes in the review. It is just a very good story for me so far. :)
Author's Response:
Oh no not at all haha. I love seeing your comments. This story doesn't generally get a lot of them so it can be hard to tell if I did alright or if it's not clicking. Your comments are the primary feedback I've been getting and it's been nice seeing someone put so much thought reflecting on the story, and I'm happy you enjoy it!