Date: February 23 2022 4:38 PM Title: Chapter 1 Changes are Afoot
I wonder if the doctors are wrong about the missing growth part , as stories where size and family roles change make it interesting
[Report This]Date: October 21 2021 2:42 AM Title: Chapter 1 Changes are Afoot
You craft interesting story arcs and have kept me engaged throughout. The only advice I have is for you to work on including more description. You may picture something in your head as you write, but we as readers are given very little to picture when every sentence is an action. You should try to let those sentences breathe more by including further description, context, and thoughts in between those. That as well as the dialogue. Instead of t someone said no, why not take a crack at some actual dialogue with quotes?
Author's Response:
I really appreciate your feedback. As for a couple of your points, when I had begun writing my earlier stories, they really got bogged down in too much detail, to the point where the narrative flow really suffered. And at that time, I wasn't doing any sort of rendering to give readers a visual representation of what I was trying to convey. (I was exclusively on DA for the first couple of months). If I could ever figure out a way to post scenes that I have rendered in my GW chapters I would. As for the actual dialogue, I found out that I was really terrible at it. It had no flow, was extremely clunky, and overall it sucked, to be honest. I just never went back to work on it. That's on me, for being too lazy/terrified of going back to work on that aspect. I will always take advice, and if you could help with either of your points I addressed, I would be grateful. I am on Discord (twoodjr #0856), DA (GentleGiant1970), or if you are more comfortable with email (Thomaswood239@yahoo.com). Thank you again for your input and feedback.
Date: October 01 2021 4:45 AM Title: Chapter 1 Changes are Afoot
I wonder if they submit to a cure that inflows the formula that changes things
Date: September 19 2021 11:25 AM Title: Chapter 1 Changes are Afoot
Ok I've been enjoying this story a lot so far especially Meg's and James's relationship! Usually I reply when a story is done on that verge if canceled but this ending of the latest chapter reeeally got me!! Im really anxious for the next chapter🔥🔥
[Report This]Date: July 16 2021 5:23 PM Title: Chapter 1 Changes are Afoot
That female secretary deserves a hard lesson. I hope Meg will give it to here.
If that Adams family is smart it stays friends with Meg and her family.
Author's Response:
Thank you for the response. I am at a point in the story where both James and his father are going to have make choices. Does James go against his mother's wishes and stay with Meg? And does Tom choose the well being of his family due to the need for health insurance over his own. I have to figure it out.
[Report This]Date: April 26 2021 8:02 PM Title: Chapter 1 Changes are Afoot
The points you are making are spot on.
The realistic setting and problems, etc.
For me this is more true good horror, than the over the top giantess story with unrealistic trasitions or behavior patterns. Because it is so subtle, but loosing your job and being humiliated like that and knowing this will stay and increase.
Hope you get your flow again.
Author's Response:
Thank you. I actually did get into a nice rhythm.
[Report This]Date: April 26 2021 5:50 PM Title: Chapter 1 Changes are Afoot
Your story touches very realistic topics. Very well done.
Author's Response:
Thank you! Although I felt that this chapter wasn't my best. I hadn't had a chance to work on it in about a month, and I felt I lost the flow.