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Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 25 2021 11:20 PM Title: Reawakening

Construction workers just never seem to learn: sooner or later, there is ALWAYS someone bigger and stronger coming along to kick their butts.

Author's Response:

"How many times do we have to teach you this lesson old man?" - Fish man

Reviewer: Lupin Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 25 2021 7:36 PM Title: Reawakening

This moral downward spiral Jisoo is kind of going in is pretty enjoyable to witness, but it just makes me want Eren to snap out of the Anakin-like blind faith he has in her. Jisoo turning back into a monster has me eager to see if Eren's relationship with Maddie goes in a positive direction. Right now it seems like it's either get brainwashed into blindly following this nefarious overseas cult or snap out of it and be hunted by assassins. Maddie just seems like someone he can trust now that he's seen both sides of her, but we'll see whether he decides to forgive her and regroup with her or fall into line like Jisoo is hoping.

Author's Response:

I'm very happy to hear that feedback! Jisoo started this story off trying to be a good person and as the story continued regressed back into her old ways. The previous chapter was her big turning point where she completely solidified who she was now, so I'm excited to explore the next stage of her character arc.

Reviewer: BrickandBorty Signed [Report This]
Date: October 25 2021 9:39 AM Title: Rescue

Fantastic story so far! I do have some questions about Jisoo's family though.

1) Byung-ho isn't actually Jisoo's biological father, right? The story told to his ex-wife was false? 

2) Is there a reason why Daiyu Fang's descendants go by a different surname (Chen)? If the clan's naming convention is matriarchal in nature (passes down through women), why would the surname change? 

3) Are there male members of the Chen Family, or does the bloodline only produce women? It is mentioned earlier that both Jisoo and Grace started off as specks and went through an ascension later in life. Would males not go through this ascension and have to stay specks? It would be an interesting family dynamic to have all female family members be normal sized and all males be specks.

Author's Response:

Thank you for the comment!


1) Correct, Byung-ho is her adoptive father and Tae-yeon is an adoptive older sister.

2) This will be said later but it's a pretty non-important spoiler: Chen is the surname of Baochai Fang's first husband, and after she assumed control of his company she decided to use Chen instead of Fang since it was more marketable to English-speakers.

3) There are male members of the clan, but you'll find out later what life is like for them!

Reviewer: lightwing Signed [Report This]
Date: October 25 2021 4:40 AM Title: Reawakening

Wow. At first I was critical of Jisoo and her family with their "operation humanity's reduction" and the obvious problems with that.  But after being reminded of the sort of "people" Jisoo and Grace typically hunt now I'm wondering why their family hasn't done round 2 yet.  Are they short of certain resources or are they setting themselves up in every country before they flip the switch?

Part of me wants them to succeed so some ironic punishment can heaped up the brobs.  Can't casualy dismiss specks as parasites when you become one now can you? Bonus if the specks turn on the former brobs for their poor treatment, like what Eren did to what's her name.

Another part of me wants them to succeed just so we can see the true "new world" they talk about.  Besides those lost depending on where they were and what they were doing during Diminution round 2, I imagine there will be plenty who won't tolerate living as specks and plenty who will resist being ruled by the Amrita Corp.  Like the saying goes: No plan survives first contact with the enemy.

Author's Response:

Another great way to put that quote, everybody has a plan until they get punched in the face.

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 25 2021 2:09 AM Title: Reawakening

Too much mercy kills. They should be tortured over a long period of time. These evil people need to know something very terrible will happen, before their limbs are torn off.

She should force them to take all the body parts out of the elderly and children they killed. Carrying out children's bodyparts out at their current size will make them go insane. Than keep them for e week and tell them that their fates wil get much worst and that she will slowly rip of there limbs. 


Liking this story very much.

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Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 20 2021 2:30 AM Title: Reveal Part 3

Masterfully poignant interlude.

Author's Response:

I aim to please!

Reviewer: MickShh Signed [Report This]
Date: October 19 2021 1:57 AM Title: Reveal Part 3

Honestly. I don't know how I feel. I can kind of understand why you pushed Eren this way, but its also revealing of an unrealistic change in him. If he was vengeful he would've been vengeful after his parents died. He wasn't. His reaction to Mary(is that the girls name?) says such. He was indifferent. But now he feels vindicated to kill bigger people just because? No Thomas did not deserve to die. No justification they make is right. I feel you as the author understand that for sure, but I'd figure Eren would too. He's been written like that all along. 


Overall I still like the story, I just see you're trying to force a relationship between Eren and Jisoo. It's fine, but its a recommendation to break ties then try to reunite them. I feel that would've been a better approach. 


And honestly I think most people liked Thomas. He was a soldier, fought for his country and family. Was killed unjustly. Kind of like how most soldiers go, just left to die without a second thought; kind of like how specks are treated. So in essence Jisoo and Eren are hypocrites. Massive ones. 


Also, I would want to make a spinoff when your story is done on it if that'd be alright. Cause well ngl Grace gets the loins going. But also because I feel like the backstory could be expanded in a weird way. Anyway it's up to you, and what you end up making of the story first, but yeah, good chapter, just feels forced though. 

Author's Response:

The last line of the chapter is really important here: only a speck can understand. Eren like most specks is helpless to do anything about the injustices faced by his people, so in most occasions they don't lash out or seek revenge since it's a hopeless endeavor. Instead they keep all those emotions under the surface for their own safety. However Eren when around his own people is a bit more forthright with violence (hence his fight with Oscar which started over a rude comment, and history of fights according to Gabriel) so he's not indifferent when it comes to people who he can feasibly interact with. With Maddie since she was a normal person who he could not feasibly do anything towards, and she had also earned his admiration, he responded with indifference not because he is opposed to vengeance but rather there was nothing he could have done to her if he wanted.

And this is where we get to Jisoo. She is a speck who became human and also part of a very wealthy, influential family. So she is in the very unique situation where she actually can get revenge on people who have wronged her. Unlike Eren and pretty much every other speck. He stays with her for a couple reasons. The biggest is what she did was pretty much emotional manipulation by bringing up his parents, and asking if he would do anything differently if granted the opportunity. As a speck he is one of the few people who can understand why she's so violent and vengeful towards bigger people. Furthermore, he feels indebted to her since she not only saved his life but also has provided a wonderful new life for him. Subconsciously he knows that if he left her that could all come to an end, and his old miserable life would come back. I hope this explains the reason for why he for the time being chose to stay with her.

As for a spin-off, I'm flattered but this story is so far from finished I couldn't really consider one. Grace is definitely a character who might get her own fun spin off but for now it would be best to keep them all contained to this story.

I appreciate the thoughtful review!

Reviewer: Lupin Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 19 2021 12:11 AM Title: Reveal Part 3

I'm really hoping Eren actually catches on to Jisoo's manipulation because ooooh boy am I starting to turn against them. I guess Eren is an engineer though so he might already be suspecting something, as he should be a decent problem solver. I'm really excited to see how Eren's old boss will tie in to all of this and if they'll even actually reunite. I came for the romance but now I'm hooked on the conspiracy.

Author's Response:

Fingers crossed! We have not seen the last of Maddie, I can say that much!

Reviewer: InscrutableDjinn Signed starstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: October 18 2021 7:03 PM Title: Reveal Part 3

While the backstory of Jisoo was nice, I think their judgment of Thomas was weak and hippocritical. Alice was a monster, true. However Thomas still tried to protect her out of familial love. He didn't condone her actions, he just still loved his sister and was reunited with her after a long ordeal only to be shrunken and tortured for trying to find a lost loved one. Thomas wasn't a monster, he was just misguided. I think that any amount of research into their lives, something that was almost certainly done would have revealed that aspect about him. To just lump him in the same category as his sister seems like a weak justification to do whatever they wanted. If they were as smart as you've written them to be, and with such a desire to make the world a better place I think they would've made an effort to reform him. Sure, he knew too much to be released, but he wasn't deserving of the torture and murde visited upon him. I like the story, but these last few chapters leave me feeling disappointed.

Author's Response:

So as for their justification with Thomas, in the previous chapter it was stated that one of the reasons Jisoo outright killed Thomas was to prevent him from sharing his side of the story, since she wanted to sculpt what Eren thought of her actions. She knew she could manipulate Eren with memories of the trauma from his parents murder, and he would be more receptive since Eren already feels so indebted to her as is. Moreover it is worth noting that the world that Jisoo and Grace want may not necessarily be a place where people like Thomas exist to begin with, both have shown themselves to kill people for even the slightest provocation. To them Thomas is not really a person to be reformed and more of a thing to be used and then discarded, and they will simply use whatever justification they need to do Eren will remain on their side. 

As another reviewer noted for this chapter, it could be interpreted that Jisoo either lied or omitted certain parts of the truth. Remember that her entire goal with this conversation was to make sure that Eren remained at her side, so she would be incentivized to paint her actions in a positive light and downplay Thomas’s place as a protector to his sister. If she had simply admitted that she killed Thomas because she felt like it and she enjoys how it makes her feel, Eren’s reaction would have been very different, so she came up with an excuse closer to home he would agree with. 

Bear in mind that Jisoo considers herself to be a ‘monster’, as she agreed with Alice when she called her such. She doesn’t really consider herself to be a ‘good person’. To her being a good person means doing what she considers furthering her family’s interpretation as the greater good, not anybody else’s. Furthermore she is a former speck who suffered for years as such, and makes choices based on her emotions before anything else. I’m sorry that you haven’t enjoyed these past few chapters but feel like it’s important to understand the characters motivations and perspective, since it drives their decisions and what they say to each other may lies or half-truths, which a lot of this chapter was.

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 18 2021 3:50 AM Title: Reveal Part 3

Why do I get the feeling that lies have been told to Jisoo.

Still, they simply could have been captured and tortured. This is a mercy kill.
Grace's fun is now been taken away. 

Author's Response:

In the last chapter, one of Jisoo's motivations was to ensure that Thomas's complete side of the story would never be told. It makes it a bit easier to lie when nobody can contradict you huh? : )

Reviewer: Xinunar Signed [Report This]
Date: October 14 2021 3:14 AM Title: Reveal Part 1

That is a really good story. 

Author's Response:

Thank you!

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 11 2021 4:08 AM Title: Reveal Part 2

You know, that's the mixed blessing of the kind of dramatic conversation Eren and Jisoo are going to have in the next chapter. The realization that all buried truths inevitably get exhumed. And, sometimes, sooner rather than later.

Author's Response:

Some truths are dug up and revealed, others only partially!

Reviewer: lightwing Signed [Report This]
Date: October 11 2021 3:43 AM Title: Reveal Part 2

Wooow.  When I first started reading this story, it was a "giant woman saves tiny man and protects him" sort of thing, which is great because I love gentle stories with a bit of a kick in them.  This story has gone far and above what I expected when I started reading and I quite like the tropes being explored.  Jisoo's "good but not soft" giant protector, Maddie's "dismissive of specks but realizes and regrets her mistakes", Grace's casual friendliess towards friends but ruthlessness towards those outside it.

And Eren. Poor boy has a lot to process now.  On another note, I'm guessing Jisoo's family's plan is to shrink everyone else in the world and rule over them as benevolent overlords.  That comes off as an idea that sounds nice but has a lot of unmentioned sacrifices along the way.  Those who resist, those who try to flee, those who can't cope with their new size, those who were shrunk while carrying something or operating vehicles, etc.  Though it depends on how the family intends to shrink everyone.  Then there's the matter of what happens if people find out they shrank the world.  Hard to be benevloent overlords when your subjects are rebelling and hate you.

Anyway, this story continues to be great.  I look forward to what you have planned next!

Author's Response:

An unmentioned casualty of the Diminution were all the people who shrunk in the middle of something very important. It would be very unfortunate if the pilot of a commercial air liner was to suddenly shrink and crash the entire plane, and that sort of stuff happened. An interesting point you bring up! And for the three main female characters those are very accurate descriptions of each. Jisoo is conflicted person who understands she isn't a good person by definition; she does bad things for the right reason. Maddie has underwent a bit of character development and knows what she has done is wrong and wants to be better. As for Grace she's definitely the most divisive character atm with a few people! She is a very friendly and kind woman to those close to her, but cruel towards those she considers her enemy.


Reviewer: Barrowman Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 11 2021 2:36 AM Title: Reveal Part 2

I wonder what revelations she will reveal to Erin. Is Jisoo the head of the family or a higher rank than Grace?

Because she decided upon herself without Grace's approval to end Grace's project that was interesting and fun to her.


Author's Response:

Yah she absolutely ruined Grace's pet project, especially after she went through so much trouble to acquire Thomas for herself.

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 05 2021 3:51 AM Title: Reveal Part 1

Hoo-boy! I can just hear the introduction, now.

"Fit? Meet Shan!"

Author's Response:

Sh*t absolutely hits the fan next chapter ;)

Reviewer: somerandomguy7 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 04 2021 1:32 PM Title: Reveal Part 1

Nice, I always thought the whole situation with Thomas seemed to be resolved to easily. Like, he was literally the only obstacle left for any concrete problem that could cause complications with Jisoo and Eren's relationship, aside from the marriage process with all the traditions. 

This is going to complicate things, guess Jisoo is going to have to explain things earlier than expected. Which I know that Eren might struggle to accept. Or he could try and forget about it, but be more careful when talking to Grace and Jisoo, slowly feeling scared to be in their presence. That type of doubt might cause him to further inquire directly both of them on the situation, so I'm interested to see how this plays out.

Also, side note, can't believe someone would spend almost a billion dollars at a mall. At that point she should just buy the mall. I'm also interested to see if there's going to be a Franklin version that will now be used as well for the speck community. Keep up the good work! 

Author's Response:

So as for Lily (Grace's little sister) spending almost a billion dollars, the timeline this story is in as previouly mentioned in earlier chapters is in the 22nd century and there is a heavy amount of inflation. It is still a massive amount of money regardless of the era, but not quite as similar to how we envision it. Minimum wage in this world's USA is almost $50 for instance. 

Reviewer: johnsmith10992 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 04 2021 12:10 PM Title: Reveal Part 1

Wonderful addition! Not gonna lie, I always found their mission to destroy Thomas to be fairly flawed. From how much he tried to protect his sister, to his reaction to learning about how she treated specks, Thomas seems to be a fairly decent guy. Kinda hoping he ends up ok.

Author's Response:

Thomas is definitely not a bad guy, he just has the unfortunate role of being a person on the other side of the proverbial fence. Which makes him a rather tragic target for people who can do all sorts of crazy things.

Reviewer: lightwing Signed [Report This]
Date: October 04 2021 5:38 AM Title: Reveal Part 1

One the one hand, good for Maddie helping people.  On the other hand, woo boy Eren found a doozy.  That's going to be awkward to explain.

Author's Response:

Probably a pretty awkward conversation right before their big trip too!

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 01 2021 8:08 PM Title: Release

Fantastic on all levels. One might even say...your most poignant chapter, yet!

Author's Response:

Hopefully it only gets better from here!

Reviewer: MickShh Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 28 2021 2:05 AM Title: Rescue

I completely understand the premise of this site, but considering I'd imagine the point of the story is to give a decent amount of plot with the giantess fetish, Grace just annoys me. 


My issue stems from the inconsistency. She acts as a vigilante dealing out cruel punishment to speck-abusers, just like her cousin, and yet she literally just enslaved a good guy, who for all intents and purposes just wanted to save his sister. He never hated specks, hurt them or oppressed them. 


At this point if the entire point of Grace isn't to be a sadistic pet-keeper I just want an admission of it. Because that's all I really see her as now, the kinky sadistic hot asian woman of the story. 


I apreciate sadistic female characters in stories/movies etc. A lot of media usually don't portray women as sadistic, at least in regular entertainment, when in fact they easily can be. My problem is it's just it's like she turned a switch. The sadism was there a bit in the beginning, but now it's on full blast. 


Don't get me wrong it's basically the hottest part of the story for me when Grace is in action, especially when she first captured Claire, the disregard she gave for literally entombing someone in her footwear was just crazy, but god damn I hate how she thinks of herself as a good person sometimes. Her actions with Thomas clearly shows she's not, sometimes her actions allign with "good". 


Overall though, this is one of the best stories I've read on this site. Honestly probably the best that's still here and not deleted or banned off the site. You don't just throw kinky scenarios with no plot or dialogue, you give a semblance of a story, even if the plot itself is so far-fetched its funny at certain times. 


Anyway thanks for writing so far, this story has been grat so far. I just wanted to get these thoughts out of my head and on electronic paper. 

Author's Response:

"Kinky sadistic hot asian woman" is probably the profile description Grace uses on dating profiles lol. 

There are almost 8000 stories on this site and that is very high praise to hear that this is among the best of them! Thank you very much, I definitely try to balance plot and sexual content as much as possible. Ultimately this site and most of its stories are intended to be pornographic, although there are many examples of genuinely good stories to read for more than just to smut. So whenever I put pen to paper so to speak it's a delicate act to make sure that there is not copious amounts of meaningless sex but also not an overload of strictly world building and character development some readers are not here for. I am pleased to hear the pace so far has been pretty good!

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