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Reviewer: sandman579 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 28 2021 12:46 PM Title: Crisis Response, Part 1

Hurray, I get to double down on why he doesn't have to reconcile with his mother and now I'm sad. She was already a mean and neglectful parent before Brian's framing, I think there might've been a "you remind me of him" hostility towards his for looking like the father that abandoned them. The vindictive part of me wants  his reunion to go like this "Hi, I'll make this quick. This is going to be our 2nd last reunion mom. The last will be at your funeral. Don't bother contacting me, I won't get back with you." You could put a final nail in the coffin on Brian closing his heart to his mother by having Brian and the girls learn his mom got paid to be in a criminal documentary, and have her complain in her interview about Brian and say what a wierd and disturbed kid he was since the productiuon company would love to profit on the public's rabid interest in the case. Jenn of course could refuse to be in it or her interview about what a loving and compassionate brother he was could be cut out or have snarky commentary over it "On the outside, a loving brother. But there was something dark in Brian Bentley. Something twisted".

 

And speaking of Jen: "I promise, Jen". (Squuee) https://imgur.com/gallery/kHPxj2F

You have promised us an adorable and heartfelt reunion with his sister, who may have been the only person 100% convinced this entire time her brother was innocnet all along. I wonder if Jen still led a semi normal life after her brother's public trial. If she didn't have her identity protected she probably endured a lot of bullying and social ostracizing, especially if she argued with her taunters by saying Brian was innocent. I'm worried if she might've developed a tough shell from society and her own mother telling her brother, the closest and most loving person to her, was an evil monster. It would be sad to see their first reunion end with Jen glaring at him and blaming him for her life turning to hell before getting up and leaving. I'm curious to see where in the story Brian will be reunited with Jen. During Elizabeth's campaign to revisit the Bentley case? After he's been cleared innocent and revealed to the public but still small, or after he's fully restored? I can see Brian saying he doesn't want to see her before he's restored because he doesn't want her to see him so small and vulnerable.

 

Finally, is Brian's current amnesia state going to warrant him leaving Allison to be in Elizabeth's care for the time being? Even if Allison still wants to be with him and keep him there, if Elizabeth carries him out to see Allison again and he freaks out, I think Elizabeth will firmly request he stays with her. It would be an interesting "plot thickens" point if the night or day after Brian leaves for Elizabeth's place, Allison get visited by police and strange higher ups who claim to be acting on a tip on an ex Chevalier breaking SPAR protocols and smuggling out a condemned inmate.



Author's Response:

Yeah, Brian has very little motivation to reconcile with his mother. It's not like he's exactly missing their interactions prior to the conviction, after all. Fair to say that they'll reunite at some point, though, so I hope you find it interesting! There are definitely a few ways it could go. I also think that the criminal documentary is a really interesting idea! I'll have to give that some thought, so thanks!

I hope Brian's reunion with Jen lives up to your expectations! Unlike with his mother, Brian obviously has a strong motivation to see her again. As for when it will happen, though, time will tell. If you remember from chapter 12 of the first story, in the flashback between Brian and his mother in the prison, she mentions that Jen was being bullied due to the trial, and that they were both getting death threats. So she was definitely targeted, and that combined with losing her brother undoubtedly had a huge effect on her development from there. 

Brian's living arrangements moving forward will be a focus very soon, so I hope you'll enjoy what happens. Elizabeth certainly won't sit still in regards to letting things continue as they have been. Thanks for reading!

-Pluto

Reviewer: johnsmith10992 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 28 2021 12:34 PM Title: Crisis Response, Part 1

It may have sucked to right, but I couldn't turn away. Fantastic chapter and anxiously awaiting part 2. Oh and hope midterms turned out okay :)



Author's Response:

I'm glad you found the chapter compelling! Yeah, I guess I just don't like writing conflict between the main characters. Like with the argument in the first story. But, sometimes it has to happen.

Midterms were fine, thanks! Lots and lots of essays. Ironically, essays are a lot easier for me to write these days. 2000 word essays don't seem nearly as intimidating when I've written over 100,000 words in the last few months! Thanks again for your continued reviews.

-Pluto

Reviewer: HOZANGA Signed [Report This]
Date: March 27 2021 11:18 PM Title: Crisis Response, Part 1

Honestly? I love Allison but that scolding was JUST what the doctor ordered. I really hope the terrible decision isn't something stupid that will serve as the start of *gasps* FILLER CHAPTERS!!11! But regardless, I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next

GOD I loved that all of us complaining about how stupid Allison behaves during intimate times got vindicated. Maybe now she'll understand her relationship dynamics a bit better, and might even want to get Brian back to normal. After, all, *as I like to say* A person should only be submissive towards someone, if they're willing to be submissive towards them. Therefore, Allie should think about letting Brian be the one in charge every now and then, regardless of their size differences.

As always, great work! 

Let's see what you have planned for later...

P.S. This chapter got you semi-invited to my community party because of the scolding Allie received. It's like you said, actions have consequences. 



Author's Response:

I'm glad you felt like the scolding was appropriate, and that it vindicated your prior concerns! The plan was always for Allison's behavior to come across as problematic, so the concerns were all well deserved. 

I have to admit, I'm not quite sure what would qualify as a filler chapter for you (especially since I'm not trying to meet a certain number of chapters or anything), so I just hope you enjoy the direction I have planned!

Thank you very much for reading, and your continued reviews! I really appreciate them. And I'm glad to hear about the semi-invite! I'll be sure to aim for the full one.

-Pluto

Reviewer: HOZANGA Signed [Report This]
Date: March 21 2021 11:59 PM Title: A Crisis

Bruh.

I really would like to just leave the review at that but I don't want it to seem like I didn't enjoy the chapter..! Albeit not what I expected (like everyone I think I was kind of hoping for more intimacy from brian's side as well) but I guess we'll have to see how this goes! Definitely a plot twist I wasn't expecting! 

Also goddammit Allison your stupid "dom teasing" is literally working backwards just let the tiny dude take control it's not that hard to realize he might feel diminished if you go psycho horny mode on him 

Regardless the chapter was pretty cool, not my favorite, but I still throughly enjoyed it! I just hope it doesn't take 5 chapters for Brian to regain his self and understand what's going on. And moreover I think we all hope we get to see allie and Brian actually explore brian's demisexuality a bit more, but I guess we'll see when that happens. I'll make sure to organize a community party when Brian and Allie manage to have sex after all! 

Great writing as always!

And once again, 

Bruh.

 

 

 

 

 



Author's Response:

I totally approve "bruh" as a response to this chapter. Yeah, it's a pretty big shift from the previous few chapters. That's definitely the intent! I've been trying to plant the seeds for this development throughout the story (even Chapter 1 foreshadows this event pretty hard), so hopefully it doesn't feel out of place. Glad you enjoyed it, though!

Yeah, Allison wasn't thinking clearly. It's important to remember that she was still slightly drunk, as well. She put her own enjoyment first, and it completely backfired. 

Oh don't worry, it won't take that long for Brian to come back. I'm not interested in any kind of "amnesia" arc. It won't be right away either, though, so I hope you enjoy how the whole situation develops. And I'll be sure to look forward to your community party! (If I'm even invited, of course x_x)

-Pluto

Reviewer: Exosaur Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 21 2021 5:22 PM Title: A Crisis

Me after reading the first paragraph: FINALLY A FULL FANSERVICE CHAPTER LET'S GOOOOOO.

Me after reading the entire chapter: I'll proceed to f*cking KMS NOOOOOOOOOOOO.

Great chapter as always! <3



Author's Response:

I know, I'm so sorry to do you all dirty like that! I just think this story (and Brian) isn't quite ready to go sexual yet. Regardless, I'm glad you enjoyed(?) it! I hope you'll enjoy the next chapter.

-Pluto

Reviewer: Lupin Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 21 2021 3:18 PM Title: A Crisis

Another excellent chapter! This one succesfully broke my heart (I mean this in a good way). Its just a testament to how good you are at conveying emotion in your writing. I can't wait for the next installment. As always, I will hope for the best but prepare for the worst ;-; 



Author's Response:

I'm glad that this chapter resonated emotionally with you, even if they aren't the happiest emotions! I really appreciate your kind words, and continued reviews. I hope you will enjoy where we go from here!

-Pluto

Reviewer: sandman579 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 21 2021 8:41 AM Title: A Crisis

So his sexual assaults during his prison years did become a mental trauma for him. I think given his size and circumstances, Allison really should stop with all the "ittsy-bitsy man" taunting, "I like making you feel trapped" and vulnerble statements, and just general sense of dominance she likes to exude on Brian when they try being intimate. Lady he had a bad reaction to just from you taunting him about his size and pushing your lips up against him and whispering "your so cute" just the other day. It should've been a little more clear that he's got bad history with forced sexual acts, and not being in control is a red flag for his psyche. He has the interest to be intimate with her, but she needs to let him be the initiator. Let him approach her body and decide the acts. We'll have to see how much of a wall of solitude Brian raises after this. If he's willing to be intimate with her again before a possible restoration, or if he can't be comfortable enough to approach her again like that without being her size equal.



Author's Response:
That's exactly right, Allison was going about being intimate in the completely wrong way. Both she and Elizabeth assumed that Brian's negative feelings were simply nerves in response to being aroused for the first time, when it was actually him starting to remember his assault. And Allison was focusing too much on what got *her* excited, which is what triggered Brian's trauma. The correct way, as you say, would be to let Brian take the lead. Unfortunately, they're realizing that a bit too late. I hope you'll enjoy how this affects the story going forward.
-Pluto

Reviewer: johnsmith10992 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 21 2021 3:46 AM Title: A Crisis

Shoulda went with a gift card.

Reviewer: HOZANGA Signed [Report This]
Date: March 18 2021 10:49 AM Title: A Birthday Party

I just love the way you keep on telling us you won't be updating frequently, and then proceed to update frequently!

While I feel like the last 2 chapters are kind of filler chapters, that doesn't mean I didn't throughly enjoy them! 

Seeing Brian get more accustomed to Elizabeth and develop his emotions a bit further really goes a long way in connecting the reader to the characters! The demi-sexual part was a nice little touch to indicate that something can and probably will indeed happen between him and Allie sooner than later as well

I'm also really glad he had a blast at his birthday party, and I definitely cannot wait to see the next chapter, I'm sure your writing will do naughtly little Allie justice! We just have to wait and see how Brian is going to react to his little (or rather big...) present ^_^

Great work as always!



Author's Response:

I know! I keep telling myself that I'm not gonna write for a while, only to get restless within the next couple days and start again. What can I say, I'm having fun.

For sure, these chapters don't have a lot to do with the overarching SP plot. I decided to split this story into sections, and the chapter names are what separates them. The chapters starting with "The Big..." relate to the first meeting with Elizabeth, the ones with a word ending in "s" relate to Elizabeth's second visit and her reveal, and the recent ones starting with "A..." are ultimately about Brian's sexuality.

Still, I'm glad you're enjoying them! Yep, this present will absolutely elicit a big reaction from Brian. I hope you enjoy how it proceeds!

-Pluto

Reviewer: johnsmith10992 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 17 2021 7:23 PM Title: A Great Idea

Awkward chuckle huh? Is my mind going to the gutter on this one or is she thinking of something to 3D Print for Kinkier purposes lol?



Author's Response:

Well... I guess you'll have to find out in the next chapter!

-Pluto

Reviewer: sandman579 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 15 2021 2:32 PM Title: A Reconciliation

"She's smuggled out convicts"- Ah, I must've forgotten Cathy admitting this to Allie. That's pretty damning. It does kind of dash my old theory that the government is monitoring and studying SPAR sessions as a psychological social experiment if Cathy and likely other Chavaliers have a habit of smuggling out their victims to torture them some more. Brian Bentley should've been an exemption to this since the judicial system was bribed to get rid of him. Although if they do monitor sessions they knew Allie had a perfect track record of not breaking the rules and taking a convict home. In which case a  "Should we interfer sir?" "No, no. I want to see how far they get" plot could form. Powerful people aware of what's going on, or a system too powerful wielded by the corrupt and incompetent. I lean more and more towards the system is a powerful tool and no one competent is in charge of it. I am curious to see if Cathy learns of Brian's innocense or is convinced of it when he's regrown or still shrunken and if they meet again to see how they interact.



Author's Response:

Yeah, that was a pretty important piece of info that Cathy so casually admitted. I like your theories as to the nature of the SP, and I hope you enjoy learning what I have in mind!

It's definitely interesting to think about what a reunion with Cathy would look like if Brian's innocence is revealed. A lot could happen if his innocence is revealed to the world, but I think it's fair to say that he would be owed a lot of apologies by a lot of people, including Cathy! I hope you enjoy where we go from here.

-Pluto

Reviewer: johnsmith10992 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 14 2021 12:26 PM Title: A Day Off

Perfectly executed. Well-done!



Author's Response:

Thanks much!

-Pluto

Reviewer: Lupin Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 13 2021 7:22 PM Title: A Day Off

I absolutely loved this chapter! It's great to finally see that Brian is starting to develop feelings of sexual intimacy (even if they aren't the most positive so far) because it really helps to keep their relationship from becoming stagnant. I really hope that they continue to move forward into uncharted territory because I think they both deserve some romantic intimacy (when they're ready of course). You deserve to enjoy "a few well earned comforts." Godspeed.



Author's Response:

I'm really glad to hear it! Yeah, even if it is surrounded by a lot of pain and confusion at the moment, Brian is developing something that has the potential to make both him and Allison very happy. I hope you enjoy how their physical relationship develops further! It'll be easier now that it's all out in the open.

Also, don't think you can sneak a LOTR reference by me, Pippin!! Thanks for your continued reviews.

-Pluto

Reviewer: Bletch Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 13 2021 2:11 PM Title: Looking Forward

“I’m not some piece of meat, you know.”

“Mmm, that’s for sure,” Allison replied as she brought her palm up to her face. “You’re a specimen.”

 

Haha. I loved this chapter. Some sentences were very funny to read, others were hot.

Keep up! :)



Author's Response:

I'm glad to hear it! I felt like this chapter turned out well, so I'm happy you enjoyed it. I'm also glad you liked the humor! Thanks for reading.

-Pluto

Reviewer: sandman579 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 12 2021 3:10 PM Title: Consequences

"There's no conspiracy, it's not like that". Noo, not my speculations and machinations! Kind of annoyed by Elizabeth being schocked that Allsion and Ben didn't have a plan or course of action to clear his name. Lady by your own confession you took no steps in actually helping him. The fact he's alive is purely luck.

 

I think Brian's fofo when things got intimate with Allison at the end, speficially someone saying into his ear "You're so cute" is hinting that he might relapse into nightmares involving when he was raped in prison in the 2+ years he was there.

 

Curious to see what Elizabeth plans to do with a notebook of Brian recounting the events oof the night Osment died and the shame trial he went through. I think it likely she'll partner up with political and judicial allies, passing along the notes of "Brian Bentley's testimony" or "Brian Bentley's interrogation" to a media outlet to rekindle public interest. To be even more impactful she could record an actual video interview of Brian to leak to the media. If done with a masked interviewer interacting with him it would prove he's the real Brian since only convicted murders seem to be shrunk in this society. All police and court pictures, videos, documents were sealed, so either significant public protest or something like an up and coming state/federal prosecutor looking to advance their career by exposing judicial corruption could force the case and "evidence" back open.

 

This does mean though that he will have to be taken from Allison and hidden at some point since the government at least knows Allison was the last person to see him alive. I want to say this this duty falls to Elizabeth but i think she might get compromised as a contact with Brian at some point as well. Unless more characters get introduced in the story, this has the potential to bring Cathy back in as a surprise dark horse.



Author's Response:

I'm sorry to spoil your speculation! I'd gone back and forth on it a few times, but I ultimately felt like going full-conspiracy would broaden the scope of the story to an extent that I'm not comfortable with. It also would give me an easy out in solving problems, as a conspiracy with that much influence could practically do everything. Like, for example, if she was part of a group that had that much influence, then why couldn't they just access Brian's case files? Can't make things too easy for me!

But yeah, with that being said, Elizabeth still obviously has some power and influence. Now that she has the information, she's not gonna sit still. I hope you enjoy where the story goes from here! I really appreciate your continued reviews and detailed thoughts.

-Pluto

Reviewer: johnsmith10992 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 11 2021 4:15 AM Title: Consequences

Ten out if ten. Love the revelations and the complexity of their intimacy it ended with. He has some demons he needs her help with confronting.



Author's Response:

Glad you enjoyed it! Yeah, Brian definitely has some issues he needs to work through. I hope you enjoy finding out what they are, as well as how Allison and Brian work together to confront them!

-Pluto

Reviewer: HOZANGA Signed [Report This]
Date: March 11 2021 12:26 AM Title: Consequences

Oh you sneaky sausage! the continuation is even better than the original story! I expected elizabeths backstory and kind of expected allies reaction (and im sure once allie calms down theyll contact her again)

but boy oh boy! i absolutely LOVED the intensity and desire that got the better of Allie for a moment, that is of course while having the knowledge that she isn't going to hurt him, she just wanted to have fun like couples do ;) 

I cannot wait to see how Brian copes with the situation, especially if he ends up giving into desire as well.. and i definitely cannot wait till he becomes normal sized again, im expecting plenty of intimacy ^_^

Really looking forward to the next chapters!



Author's Response:

Thank you very much! I'm really glad you're enjoying the sequel even more than the original.

I'm glad you liked Allison's brief lapse in restraint! Of course, she would never intend to hurt him, she just wanted to have a little fun. After everything that happened that day, her love for Brian was at 500% capacity. Only so much she can take, you know?

I hope you enjoy how she continues to deal with her urges, as well as how Brian reacts to them! Thanks for your continued reviews.

-Pluto

Reviewer: johnsmith10992 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 09 2021 4:47 AM Title: Choices

My hands are starting to get tired from all thes cliffhangers lol. Once again great work! Still not sure how their boyfriend/girlfriend physical relationship works yet. Maybe we'll cross that bridge at some point? In a classy way of course that matches the tone. Also, don't let him become big, it's too obvious an ending. Have him sacrifice his size to save her. That's the kind of sacrifice she made for him, a sacrifice of future, thus finally putting them as equals. Not sure how that would work exactly, but I bet there's a way :) Anywho, looking forward to seeing this story unfold.



Author's Response:

I apologize for the repeated cliffhangers! I realized after posting that I had three in a row. For my last story I never felt too badly about cliffhangers since I was updating so frequently, but perhaps I should be a bit more responsible with this one x_x

Yes, we'll definitely be getting into that aspect of their relationship! Right now we're in the "Elizabeth" section of the story, if you will, but it'll be a focus soon enough. Elizabeth's talk with Allison about the power dynamic in their relationship is a starting point for that.

I'll be sure to keep your thoughts in mind for the ending! I think that's an interesting way of thinking about it. Regardless, I hope you enjoy where we go from here! Thanks again for your continued reviews.

-Pluto

Reviewer: sandman579 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 08 2021 2:19 PM Title: Choices

Professor Elizabeth's hand is shown:

https://giphy.com/gifs/6agGMtS4rEVSo

 

I'm wondering now if she was once indifferent or encouraging of the Shrink Penalty or is part of a grander social experiment. She has to have some link to the creation or operation of the program if she's able to manipulate recruitment and, if she reveals next chapter, which prisoners go to which Chevaliers. It also seems too weak of a plan if her goal of undermining the program after "turning against it" was subjecting a student she cared for to it by nominating her and sending the most corrupt criminal case prisoner to her. Allison clearing doesn't fit the psychological profile of a Chevalier, so Elizabeth was only going to do her more harm then good sending her there as a way of getting over an abusive ex. And Allison being convinced to spare Brian, her golden ticket to challenging the system, was entirely up to chance.

 

If she really is an outsider to the program, then maybe she is simply a friend or aquaintence of a high up executive that wants to gain clout overthrowing the system or is simply disgusted with it. "I was not the only one on your side". It would explain how she can manipulate the Shrink Penalty system but not gain access to Brian's court documents. I think she's going to upset Brian in the next chapter by explaining how she saw an opportunity with his case to attack the system, planted the idea of Brian's corrupt case with Allison, guided her into becoming a Chevalier during her struggles, manipulated the prison to send Brian to her, and then left his life entirely up to chance. Brian actually took a huge risk calling her out since she could threaten him for potentially ruining her and her partner's plans by refusing to cooperate. I also think Cathy's life is legitimately in danger since Elizabeth is "investigating her" and can send a request to her allies to silence her or kill her in order to not endanger the plan.



Author's Response:

Yep, your suspicions were correct again! You're really good at picking up on the hints that I place here and there. This definitely creates a lot of new questions about Elizabeth's true relationship with the SP, as well as how far her influence goes. I hope you'll enjoy finding out what the truth is!

-Pluto

Reviewer: Pryde Signed [Report This]
Date: March 08 2021 5:44 AM Title: Looking Forward

I've really enjoyed this. Ordinarilly I enjoy female growth/NWO type stuff, but the excellent character writing and intrging plot really won me over. Thanks for your work, I am eagerly anticipating the rest!



Author's Response:

Thank you very much for reading, and for your kind words! It means a lot that you're enjoying this story, even if it isn't the type that you would normally read. I hope you'll continue to enjoy it!

-Pluto

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