Date: April 04 2021 2:12 PM Title: Moving Forward
Elizabeth seems suspicious for some reason. I don't know why but her being manipulative before does not help her case.
Author's Response:
For sure, Elizabeth has some sneaky and manipulative tendencies. It makes sense that she comes across as suspicious sometimes. I think it's fair to say that she's one of the good guys overall, though! She just has a bit of a "do whatever it takes" mindset when it comes to what she views as the greater good. Thanks for reading, and I hope you're enjoying the story!
-Pluto
[Report This]Date: April 04 2021 1:27 PM Title: Moving Forward
Well, you've succesfully broken my heart. I can say with complete certainty that I'm feeling just as sad and angry as Brian (despite predicting that this would happen). Another example of your great emotional writing! I'm too distraught to write a longer review, so keep it up why don't ya. Godspeed and what not. ;-;
Author's Response:
Thank you, and I'm sorry!! Writing this made me sad and angry as well. I'm glad you empathize with Brian, though, and I really appreciate your kind words. Don't worry, I'm definitely going to see this thing through! Especially after an event like this. I'll try to get the next chapter out soon, so I hope you enjoy it!
-Pluto
[Report This]Date: April 04 2021 11:34 AM Title: Moving Forward
Wow, this was certainly a bombshell of a chapter but one that was necessary. I wonder if Elizabeth is going to try to woo him. I know she's more of a mother figure, however you commented earlier that she finds him attractive. Plus she's a master manipulator when she sees potential for a greater good and the circumstances are right. Perhaps in this case she believes Brian is better off with her, and when Allie took things too far she manipulated her out so she could swoop in.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review! I agree, I think this was something that needed to happen.
As for Elizabeth, I'd say that she definitely views Brian as more of a surrogate son than a romantic interest. That's not to say she isn't attracted to him at all, but she's more concerned with giving him the type of love that he was cheated out of with his actual mother. Her flirty moments were meant to be teasing (equally directed at Brian and Allison). That isn't to say that she didn't engineer this situation for her own goals, though! She's like an overprotective mother, and she felt like Brian was getting hurt because of his relationship with Allison. That's not necessarily true, of course, but that's her thought process. Anyway, I hope you enjoy how it progresses!
-Pluto
Date: April 04 2021 9:07 AM Title: Moving Forward
I WAS gonna "Bruh" you again for the break up (mostly because similar to Brian I consider it stupid and selfish) but im not gonna give you the treatment twice!
Regardless, DANGIT ALLIE! as much as I understand the concept of them splitting up I still side with Brian 100%. Allie is the sole thing that's caused him to be happy in recent years, and instead of trying hard to work over their relationship issues (which by the way they've never actually done), Allie just straight up YEETS the relationship out the window because "BrIaN DoEsN't KnOw WhAt'S GoOd FoR HiM". Like, WHATAYAMEAN??! JESUS sometimes I get upset with this story. Mostly because I know that they're gonna end up together, but I DONT HAVE ANY MORE CHAPTERS TO READ RIGHT NOW, so for now they're split up.
I get the feeling we might be encountering some characters we've seen before since allie took her car and went away, or we might be encountering brand new ones!
I also liked the way Brian sort of scolded Elizabeth, in his own way. And let her know he's not stupid, and he knew she had something to do with his break up. (GOD I hate even writing about it)
Regardless, I'm interested to see how they will react to each other when being in the same space, and I'm also interested to see how long this break up will last.
Great writing as always I GUESS (I'm a firm believer that stories that make you upset and mad are stories well written)
Looking forward to the next chapter! Hopefully it'll be one of your quick updates ;)
P.S. if for some reason you're thinking about not having Allie and Brian end up together, it's your story so you can do as you please, but I'm taking back the community party invitation >:(
Author's Response:
I know what you mean!! Don't worry, I'm with you on taking Brian's side for the most part. This kind of stuff isn't fun to write, and I'm sure it isn't fun to read, but it seemed like the natural flow of events to me. I gotta go where the story takes me. I don't make the rules! Or, wait...
I'm also really sorry to hear that this story upsets you sometimes! I know how it feels to be really annoyed and frustrated with a story, and I really really hope it isn't detracting from the story for you. I promise it won't stay bad for super long! And I appreciate you saying that you see it as a sign of good writing. That's very nice of you to say.
Anyway, I hope you enjoy what happens next! The next chapter will probably be pretty surprising, so I hope it goes well. I'll try not to delay too long in getting it out!
And don't worry, I have no intention of permanently keeping them apart. You'll have to take that invitation from my cold, dead hands!!!
-Pluto