Date: July 07 2022 3:30 AM Title: Trust
You've got a great start that really got me hooked into what I hope is the start of an amazing epic of a story. I am already in love with Artemis but im always a sucker for a good giant slaying badass, and vice versa I cant wait to see more of Azura and see her further develope as a villian as the clash between her and Artemis really starts to kick off.
You've got a good world and premise going here and I can't wait to see whats next.
Author's Response:
Thank you very much for the praise and kind words! Being both inspired by and a big fan of your work, to say I’m flattered is an understatement.
As for the story I don’t want to talk too much about these characters as doing so could be difficult without hinting too much some of what I have planned, but these two will have plenty more interactions and confrontations with one another and even other third parties. Their rivalry is the driving force of this narrative. I actually have some story developments I’m eager to get to, so the next chapter should be around the corner.
Date: May 13 2022 7:13 AM Title: Trust
Binge read the story and so far it’s pretty lit! Interested to see more of this world! :)
Author's Response:
Thank you for the kind review. I will absolutely write more, and hopefully I can deliver.
[Report This]Date: January 17 2022 10:20 PM Title: Revelations
I finally got around to reading this story and I am hooked! First, while I do enjoy the fetishy aspects, I'm actually more fond of genuine stories that happen to use my fetish and this one does exactly that.
Second, giantesses that use magic is a great concept. The size difference already grants giants great power so adding magic on top of that is even better. Plus, it seems these giants come from a more advanced civilization, even they are apparently separated from it and live more like hunter gatherers.
Third, the concept of "giantess raised by humans gets revenge on other giants for killing her family" has been done before but I'm eager to see where it goes in this story. Artemis has good reason to be angry with Azura in particular and giants in general for what they do but Azura, assuming she's telling the truth, has good reason to despise humans for what they did to her kind and her queen. She clearly wants to recruit Artemis rather than harm her, perhaps she's some distant relative of the late giant queen?
It would be an interesting twist, in my opinion, if Artemis and Azura actually do end up working together later for the benefit of both races. Not to say Artemis would forgive Azura or Azura would stop thinking of humans as vermin but trust does not necessarily mean forgiveness. Either way, I'm excited to see where you go with this story. :)
Author's Response:
Hello! Thanks for the review!
those are my kinds of stories as well, the giantess fetish is a goldmine for creativity and storytelling. Everyone has a different interpretation on how it could become possible and the power balance on its own opens up so many possibilities with character dynamics.
Now I won’t go too far into the relationship between Artemis and Azura just in case I let something slip or hint unintentionally but I will say these kinds of moral dilemmas were what I intended. While I cannot confirm or deny any speculation, I love that people are invested enough for there to be any at all.
I am excited to follow through with the narrative I have planned and I hope you enjoy the rest of the story!
Date: December 30 2021 10:05 AM Title: First Encounter
Yohoho! I have returned! Despite my silence I have been keeping an eye out for new chapters to this story. Apparently a blind eye as you've managed to sneak quite a few chapters past me! I plan to leave a further more in depth review once I am fully caught up but suffice to say, I am still watching this story and still expecting great things. :)
Date: December 03 2021 3:17 PM Title: First Encounter
Read all the chapters, this is a very compelling story that I hope will be updated. The characters backstory helps set her up on how come she is different than all other giants. I hope this story gets updated and you deserve the 5 star review I left on my last comment.
Author's Response:
I’m glad you’re so invested in this and thank you for all the kind reviews!
Yes, it felt important to me to explain why Artemis was the only giant who went out and did what she did. Which meant she needed to have a unique upbringing to allow that. If she was raised like other giants she would’ve become like other giants, there’s no reason why she would be any different.
I intend to be updating this story for a while, I have a lot I want to explore within this setting and story and where it could all lead.
[Report This]Date: November 08 2021 11:38 AM Title: First Encounter
The 1st chapter really reeled me in. It was a very well written introduction to this world you have created. I can't wait to read the next chapter.
(For your 1st story it is pretty good)
Author's Response:
Thank you and glad to hear you enjoyed it! I do intend to update this quite soon.
[Report This]Date: October 05 2021 2:32 AM Title: First Encounter
Absolutely fantastic start man. This story has tons of potential and I'm looking forward to reading it. There are lots of routes for this narrative to go and I think you have the skill to make it an excellent one.
Author's Response:
Thank you very much for the kind words and the review! Part of what took me so long to update this was deciding which route I wanted to take specifically, I always knew what would happen but the how was the question. Now I know where this story is going and I will follow through with it.
Date: February 13 2021 8:31 AM Title: Artemis
Interesting concept and I like the fantasy setting. I'm very curious what would fill Artemis with this much hatred for her own kind. It seems like she has some measure of compassion for humans as well, even if she's convinced it's only revenge that motivates her.
Author's Response:
I'm quite flattered to hear some feedback from you. I'm a big fan of your work.
Her morals are definitely unusual. She does seem to show some empathy for humans, being the sole victims of her kinds cruelty. The root of her hatred for giants remains to be seen however.
Date: February 12 2021 4:15 AM Title: Artemis
Hoo boy! This looks like it’ll be a good one! You’ve already done the first hard part and got my attention. I’m loving this premise so far. It reminds me of some of my favorite giantess stories coming out right now.
For a first attempt this is pretty good, you’ve kept my attention longer than most first time writers, now let’s talk writing and places you could improve. As I said, your concept is solid, it’s different enough and yet fantastical to inspire the imagination. There are a few key points I noticed through reading both chapters I wanted to address.
First, pacing. Slow down. You seem to be zipping through this pretty fast. Pacing can make or break even the best stories. Slow down and give the reader time to digest what they’re reading. Describe the settings, the scenery, the people, take some time to revel in where you are and what's going on around your characters. Give them memorable introductions. Artemis has a pretty alright one in the first chapter though it didn’t seem to give her much of a presence. The deuteragonist, I’mma call him “Little Man” just kind of showed up without any kind of introduction. So my main advice on this point, slow down and use descriptions. Describe what’s happening and what’s going on. Show don’t tell, let the scene be felt.
Second issue I saw arising the most was tense. It’s a small point but it has big ramifications. The tense was all over the place, though I mostly noticed it in chapter 2. This can be fixed with a little bit of proofreading. Decide whether the story is happening, in the past, present or future tense than proof it to make sure all of them line up. Like I said it’s small but it’s sneaky. Even I find myself slipping up with it now and again.
Last point I’ll make for this review here is a little touch and go. Try and find ways to explain your worldbuilding without outright explaining your worldbuilding. What do I mean by this? Instead of telling us how the world is set up, show us the world and let the reader infer the rest. Use dialogue and character interactions to let us know what is going on. So like for example, instead of outright saying Artemis has a coven of sorcerers in her hometown or that giants don’t often use magic, if she tells Little Man her secret next chapter they could have an interaction where he says something like, “Giants don’t use magic.” And she corrects him, and mentions she learned from a coven in her hometown. Stuff like that.
That’s what I have for now. I hope that helps. If you’d like me to go into finer detail or explain some of what I mean more just let me know. I’ll be looking forward to new installments of this story. From chapter 1 to chapter 2 seemed like pretty quick turnaround on chapter releases. Would love to see a regularly updated story with a premise like this coming out.
Author's Response:
Wow, I was not expecting this kind of attention so quickly! I'll definitely take these points into consideration.
The rushed pacing mostly had to do with me expecting most readers to skim through until a giantess does something sexy but now that I know someone's invested in the narrative the pacing will be worked on, as well as the exposition. With this in mind and the fact that chapter 2 is relatively short I may or may not go back and add a few more details to make it flow more smoothly.
The window between chapter 2 and 3 will likely be a bit longer given that I'll be taking this advice into account. Thanks for the review!
Date: February 11 2021 11:20 PM Title: Artemis
Sorceress giantesses is a new spin. I'm curious if her enemy is the strongest magic user among giants and killed the community Artemis lived in, giving her the grudge that drives her. I did notice it being mentioned that giants grow to 300 ft and yet Artemis is only 150 when a giant. Either growing or shrinking shenanigans will insue, or Artemis is holding herself back from growing larger then a normal giant, otherwise Artemis may go up against giants twice her size in the future.
Author's Response:
While I cannot confirm or deny any of your theories, all the questions you pose do have concrete answers to them. Thanks for the review!
Date: February 10 2021 5:34 PM Title: First Encounter
If this is your first story, I'd say it's a good start! You left me with wanting more!
Author's Response:
Thank you! Tbf I do descriptive rps on other sites so it's not my first time writing giantess content, just not to this scale. I'm glad you're liking it so far!