[Report This]Date: March 15 2021 5:30 AM Title: Part 5
Amazing story!
I just love the ending! The prison wordplay and how this assignment for her became very beneficial for her.
The shower scene was also very exciting, just the different positions they did and how she dominated him throughout the story.
I like how she was acting in the beginning and once the guy messed up, she became her true self and took advantage of the situation.
Once again, great story and I can't wait for the next one!
Date: March 11 2021 2:03 AM Title: Part 5
Great ending to a terrific story. Very well done my friend.
My only criticism, an occasional spelling error or misused word {e.g. "sinks" instead of "syncs"}.
That said, your story had incredible content. As I noted in a previous post, your description of him shrinking against Agent Aurora's skin.
The fact that all that happened was a dirrect result of the drug lords own actions; pretty much absolving Agent Aurora of anything she did.
The reverse timelime, leading Aurora to try to piece together ther previous nights events. Who hasn't woke up after a night of partying trying to remember the events of the night before? {worse words in the world to hear: "Do you remember what you did last night?" Stil sends shivers down my spine.}
The ending itself, leaving much for the reader to ponder about. Biological needs for air, food, bathroom use aside; do those needs even still exist for someone shrunken. Being imprisoned, either for life or just for an unknown period of time, inside Agent Aurora's womb as she simply walks away from the scene of the crime is pretty hot.
Please keep up writing such great stories.
The drug lord
[Report This]Date: March 10 2021 7:29 PM Title: Part 5
Excellent story!
I know what you mean by your observation that telling the story from a woman's perspective is difficult. So - good effort!