[Report This]Date: May 01 2021 9:28 AM Title: Chapter 5
Character behavior at the end of this chapter to decide to go back into VERSA feels unrelatable to me after being angry shortly before (both in the lab and when Kat told them Kevin died). Up to this point it felt like at least Rich/Harrison were intentionally one-dimensional. I think I'm supposed to be able to understand Harrison and Rich's behavior based on the way this has been written so far...
That being said, I don't think the situation is impossible - I can construct mental states for Rich/Harrison/Jessica and/or rational arguments of Kat that would convince Rich/Harrison/Jessica to agree that going back in is the "right" thing to do, but when I read this for the first time, those mental states/arguments were not the ones I had in mind. So I would have suggested more details here.
Would be hilarious if Kevin didn't actually die and Kat was just trying to get Rich/Harrison/Jessica to believe VERSA could kill them so Kat could play giantess games with them inside VERSA while Rich/Harrison/Jessica believed they could actually die.
Author's Response:
Yeah I get that. Because Chapter 5 is the set-up chapter for basically the rest of the story, the characters sort of have to decide to go out on a limb for the sake of plot. I tried to make them seem reluctant but ultimately seduced by the sheer wonderment of VERSA, especially in regards to these government agents hoping to do a little corporate espionage. Oh but don't worry, they definitely come to regret their decision.