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Reviewer: A Little Bit of Everything Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 13 2021 11:39 PM Title: Chapter 1 - The High School

I love this story so far and I certainly hope it continues.



Author's Response:

Thanks!  Let me know if there's any scenarios in this story you'd like to see next! 

Reviewer: SciFiCrazy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 13 2021 10:58 AM Title: Chapter 2 - The Restaurant

I just realized I forgot to write a review of the second chapter when I read it.

 

I really enjoyed this chapter. The concept of the restaurant and the idea that she is so naive and self absorbed that she focuses on the supposed fact that her date walked out on her and not even registering the fact that the restaurant went silent or that everyone else is missing and then procedes to consume the rest of her food and drink and then leaves. 

I also enjoyed the addition of the patron that missed the shrink process by being in the bathroom and how he helps himself to the bar and the bartender.

Thanks for continuing your story and I look forward to reading more.



Author's Response:

Thanks!  Let me know if there's any scenarios in this story you'd like to see next! 

Reviewer: SciFiCrazy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 19 2020 4:39 PM Title: Chapter 1 - The High School

Great story.  I do wonder if the charaxter may or may not become aware of what she has done.  But oe thing i always wonder with these stories if at some point or at the end if the author will mention the families and authorites and how they will cope with the unexplained absence of their children.  



Author's Response:

Thanks for the feedback!  She may become aware of what she's done, not totally sure yet.  This story is mainly going to focus on Jenny and things from her perspective, so there won't be much from the families point of view.

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 19 2020 12:22 AM Title: Chapter 1 - The High School

Can't wait for more



Author's Response:

Thank you!  Not to spoil too much but the next chapter will be Jenny playing with the laser pointer at a restaurant....

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