Reviewer: Mcpb0 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 03 2020 11:27 AM Title: A Cause for Celebration

Hey, I really like your story! It’s pretty immersive and lovely; the sexual tension between both characters is described pretty nicely :)

 

However there is a scientific misconception which happens quite often: you cannot really dilute gastric juices with water to make it harmless, because pepsine stays active until pH 5 (at pH 4 or 4.5 it is not as efficient as at pH 2 but it does it’s job nonetheless).

The problem is that you need a lot of water to raise the pH above 5 – if we assume that her gastric juice has a pH of 2, we would need more than 100l of water for 100ml of her gastric juice (yes, I’m talking about liters vs. milliliters). If her gastric juice has a pH of 1.5 (more likely), we’d need more than 316l.

A normal adult human produces around 500ml per large meal; so we are talking about more than 1580l necessary - which does not not take into account that a) Emeline is still a young human adult and b) that she’s about 3.6m large. Since she’s roughly about twice the size of a normal adult human we should be able to multiply the volume of secreted gastric juice by 2.

 

We also have another problem: The stomach of course does not stop secreting gastric juice until the pH is below 3 (then the production per time gets much slower). And even a normal sized young adult has no problems of producing more than 1.5l of gastric juice per meal if necessary (i.e. if the meal is large and buffering and sits in the stomach the whole night). 

So we’d have to diluted about 3l of gastric juice which means we’d need a little bit less than 10,000l of water to make a survivable environment for little Stephan here.

In the current scenario, Stephan would not really be recognizable as Stephan anymore in the next morning.

Author's Response:

Hahaha! This is the single greatest review I have ever received! Thank you so much for calling me out on what was ultimately a lazy writing move. And you backed yourself up with the numbers! That's just fantastic. 

You seem absolutely right. And it seems like you've seen this misconception before and simply couldn't tolerate it once more. While I was vaguely aware that you couldn't do what I described, I chose to suspend disbelief and roll with it, "because magic," and what not. But I had no idea just how far off and unrealistic it really was. So I really appreciate you clearing that up. I've done the math on quite a lot (how long it would take for a six inch man to cycle through all the oxygen in a belly that started out at 16% to bring it down below 12% and asphyxiate, or if the carbon dioxide levels would rise above 7% and kill you before that) but I've never really known where to begin when it comes to the acid problem, and just figured, hey; if she pops a few tums every hour, that'll work, right? Plus, how easy would it REALLY be to digest an intact human? Couldn't be quick. (In other words, I have no idea) So I really appreciate your apparent expertise. 

Feel free to reach out to me if you want to discuss hyper realistic situations! I'd love to have my blind spots filled in. My discord handle is available in my Bio. 

Thanks so much for the highly insightful criticism. I might actually go in and fix that issue now that you've pointed out it's glaring issues. 

Reviewer: Gershwin Signed [Report This]
Date: October 01 2020 9:27 AM Title: A Cause for Celebration

An excellent story, thank you! The character interaction and situation feels very natual, with great attention to detail wihtout getting too much. Very sexy, very erotic and well written.

Author's Response:

Very much obliged, friend! It felt very natural to write, probably in no small part due to an excellent prompt! This was the easiest to produce thing I've done in a while. it just flowed! So I'm glad you were satisfied with it.