[Report This]Date: September 07 2008 2:30 AM Title: Chapter 1
nice short story ! but quite difficult to read, moreover for me (english isn't my first language). i love the end of the story : all returns in normal life... with a secret that only she and he can know.
Date: June 15 2008 4:17 AM Title: Chapter 1
Well, that WAS a hurried yarn....possibly the reason for so many grammatical errors - spelling and punctuations. However, because insertion (in all three orifices) is my favourite scenarios, I found it rather exciting. Now, if such a story could have been longer and with more detail, I would have rated it very highly. So please, with your fantasies as in this yarn, try and write another - not forgetting all three orifices.
Date: June 13 2008 1:14 PM Title: Chapter 1
You're 100 percent correct on that, Style. I did not give a low rating based on my personal preferences, I gave a low rating because of the same reasons you did.
Date: June 13 2008 12:35 AM Title: Chapter 1
Quotation marks are needed and the story has to make more sense. Repetition of a single word is annoying. Repetition of something we already know is annoying. Repetition is annoying.
I rate this story low because of the lack of sense and also because of the lack of quotation marks. Plus, the story is generic. We've seen it before. You have to wow the audience with a less generic concept. Don't write because you're expected to write about sex, write about how you feel a story should go and fuck the time limit. THERE IS NO TIME LIMIT
Also: Jester, don't rate low because you're not into the fetish of a story. You rate by how the story is written, not by what your favourite fetish is. It's the only thing really that stops me from rating feet and toilet stories with 1 star
[Report This]Date: June 12 2008 10:48 PM Title: Chapter 1
Ehh..not really my thing. Some parts of it don't make a whole lot of sense, but I've never really been a big fan of insertion. Keep trying.