[Report This]Date: September 23 2020 8:46 PM Title: Chapter 1
This may have took a while, but I am now submitting a full review
Overall, this is way better than I would have thought of, the pacing is alright though I think It could be done better since I feel like you could put one or two more chapters, though its just my thought. The writing is pretty chaotic though you could still understand it. On it's own it's already a good work but you'll really realise how good it is till you actually read works that has these extreme of fetishes(like really, the only works I could remember in my head are yours and nanomachines) with an actual story, and not just... destruction and all that. All in all this would be a 8/10 for me. I think it is overall a good work, but it could be better
Author's Response:
Happy to hear you enjoyed it! Yeah the pacing was pretty much just a case of me going through the stages of growth and power, didn't really linger on any scale for more than one chapter. Which can lead to it feeling a bit rushed.
Now the choas was intentional on my part, wanted it to just feel like an utterly chaotic mashup where this girl gets that power and there are just no breaks on the train of her wrecking things. Thanks for the thought out criticism I appreciate it!
[Report This]Date: September 16 2020 3:47 AM Title: Chapter 1
What a phenomenal story. An instant favorite and easily one of the best size/power stories I've read ever. I'm not just saying that cause the content matter and themes are to my liking (which they totally are).
The pacing is perfect. The prose is sublime. Every description has the right amount of succinctness to leave the perfect amount to the reader's imagination. The world-building is mixed in seamlessly. Annabelle is a very interesting character you just love to read about. Stuff like how she views human communication was just an amazing tone setter and character development wrapped in one.
I can't emphasize the quality enough. Chapter 5 in particular had so many things going on at once, but you managed to convey the chaos while keeping the writing to such a high standard.
I'm unable to list everything I liked though, else this review would be huge! Rest assured, this whole story is professional in quality if not beyond. A true mastercraft!
Author's Response:
Very happy to hear you enjoyed! It kinda just came to me when I was reading Nanomachines like, hmm... this but with energy being ladies would be kinda neat to write. From there the inspiration kinda just took off. Definitely got a lot bigger then I'm used to writing these days in prose but it was super fun to do!
[Report This]Date: September 15 2020 8:57 PM Title: Chapter 7
This story has been absolutely fantastic, and is definitely one of your best works. It offered an interesting premise, and was executed wonderfully. I enjoyed the diversity in how each chapter felt, and was just interested to see the journey along the way. Thanks again for writing it!
Date: September 15 2020 5:43 PM Title: Chapter 7
Guessing by the ending of chapter 7 I'll guess that this is this end? Maybe one to three more chapters, honestly just enjoying this as a casual read before going in to reread it(if this is the final chapter)with trying to see what could better enhance the reading expirience.
Author's Response:
Chapter 8, so just one Chapter off. Good guess though! Look forward to hearing how you liked it.
[Report This]Date: September 14 2020 1:02 AM Title: Chapter 5
Hey...just want to say...I am Loving this level of power she has. Awesome story!
Author's Response:
Happy to hear it, since power is pretty much the name of the game there. Thanks!
[Report This]Date: September 12 2020 4:17 AM Title: Chapter 1
Goodness, inspiration must've seriously struck to motivate you to write so much again! As usual I enjoy the pacing your stories have, and how you take time to build up the general world, our characters, et cetera. I found the general lore presented extremely engaging and doing a great job of balancing leaving enough dangling threads to keep me interested while explaining enough to not keep me confused. I can tell that things are just going to go 'up' from here. Thank you again!
Author's Response:
Thank you, and yes I would indeed say it escalated quite a bit from there.