Reviewer: brett533 Signed [Report This]
Date: November 11 2020 1:05 PM Title: Chapter: Young Love

I really enjoy your story so far interesting characters. I would love to see where this continues to develop. 

Reviewer: Xiao-renzhe Signed [Report This]
Date: August 29 2020 8:55 PM Title: Chapter: Our Little Secret

First off, I'd just like to say that I really enjoyed this story. It didn't go quite the way I expected it to, and I'm glad for that on multiple counts. 

I really just expected this to be a story where Lily was kind to Chester and Lucy was consistently mean-spirited, perhaps even ending with her trying to eat him. The direction you decided to take it instead was unexpected and very refreshing! I love that Lucy was so changed by the experience that she learned to appreciate Chester and began to treat him like a person instead of a mere source of tormental entertainment. Seems like she just learned something about herself! And in exchange, it looks like Chester picked up a new trick to add to his list of "bedroom techniques" that he can impress Lily with later. 

You say English isn't your first language, so I want to pat you on the back for how easily intelligible this story is. It's a very smooth and enjoyable telling. You make little mistakes here and there that I'm not above making on my first pass through when writing either. A little editing and I think you'd be in near-perfect shape. So don't sweat it! 

I see that this story is marked "complete," but just wanted to say that if you continued adding more chapters to it, you've got a committed reader in me!

 

Author's Response:

Thank you for the sweet words, I am happy to hear that you enjoyed my story <3 

I have proof read it a couple of times and edited a bit but yea I knew it wasn't perfect, could definitely need someone else proof-reading it.

Also, it definitely isn't completed, I am planning on continuing this story! I am new on this site and probaly missclicked somewhere haha, I'll fix that! I got enough ideas for at least 2-3 more chapters~