Reviewer: Evil Shrinker Signed [Report This]
Date: January 23 2025 5:10 PM Title: Chapter 1

Really great story. My favorite part is that he was able to communicate with his friend and get her POV. The details were great and his change from offering to help to enjoying making the content for his site was perfect. Would love to have that opportunity - although don't want to have twist happen to me. Great story - thanks for sharing.

Reviewer: iswear12 Signed [Report This]
Date: August 16 2020 10:25 PM Title: Chapter 1

Couldn't respond on twitter so I'll just post here

First time reading your work (that I'm aware of anyways)

Overall I thought it was pretty good. A bit rambly but its forgivable to an extent because its a self-insert story and all.

Descriptive ability is solid, and I liked the twists you used a lot.

The boyfriend angle felt a bit wasted with the way he died feeling a bit detached, dying with a crowd with little description or note to mark him out

Overall though its good, could use a proofread but that's a small nitpick.

My point is that I'd like to see more, hope you didn't mind a little criticism because overall the story was a nice one and I'd *love* to see more like this, maybe trimmed down a bit on the extraneous thoughts and a bit more description to balance it out.