Date: October 02 2020 7:12 AM Title: Chapter 18 - Mrs. Samson and Nancy's unaware friend Melissa
Lol, very good chapter. I thought Mrs. Samson and Nancy's tacos were gonan lead to something, but it turned out fine just the way you did it, I hadn't even really accounted for Melissa, lol.
Author's Response:
Thanks, I like throwing an unexpected curve in! :)
Date: October 02 2020 3:46 AM Title: Chapter 19 - Mrs. Alka Padmanabhan
Another great chapter!
Nice switch to a teacher with some smaller feet again (though I love big ones, and any foot is big to Brett)
Nancy is such a bitch! Like urggggghh, I really wish she'd get off Brett's back, he likes ot be shrunk and he likes feet, he's almost an adult.
(and yes, parents 'blah blah blah' what would others think about him)
In this verse, shrinking tech is out there, it's a wish fulfillment for so many people who would relish the chance to be temporarily shrunk.
Nancy's attitude is really pissing me off, but I am still excited to see where this goes.
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review!
This universe is not going to make shrinking technology "generally" available - it exists only in fairly limited circumstances and owned by governments, prisons, militaries, universities, and corporations. As far as wish fulfillment goes, well, yes I agree it very much sounds enjoyable, but I like to write about them from a POV where it's still something novel and unusual to the characters, and I especially have trouble enjoying straightforward indulgence without any tension- I like dissembling, misunderstandings, cultural mix-ups, missed connections, and drama. So we'll probably see more of it, including from Nancy.
Date: September 26 2020 2:45 PM Title: Chapter 18 - Mrs. Samson and Nancy's unaware friend Melissa
Is that Melissa the same Melissa that's mentioned in the previous chapters? Anyway I guess it must be weird for him to find solidarity in a random stranger while his mom acts SO angry; not to mention that we still need to see if Mrs Samson meant what she said or not...
Author's Response:
Yes, same person.
Date: September 26 2020 11:07 AM Title: Chapter 18 - Mrs. Samson and Nancy's unaware friend Melissa
Damn
Nancy really has some issues she needs sorted out....like really.
Loved the interaction here, some more great feet content and ass content.
I'm worried that Brett's wrist band went off earlier, Loren may have tried to contact him.
Excited to see more as always! And great work on this chapter.
Author's Response:
Thanks!
The wrist communicator that went off was Katie messaging Brett, which he ignored at the time, but he read later in the chapter.
Once Brett told Loren that he was in Katie's custody in last chapter, she knew that she didn't have to keep personally checking in on him.
Date: September 26 2020 9:57 AM Title: Chapter 18 - Mrs. Samson and Nancy's unaware friend Melissa
Hehe , Devil-may-care from Devil may cry
Author's Response:
The expression "devil may care" is much older than the video game...
[Report This]Date: September 22 2020 7:03 PM Title: Chapter 17 - Loren's exit, and Mrs. Samson and friends
Still loving the story, great update!
Author's Response:
Thanks!
Date: September 22 2020 1:40 PM Title: Chapter 17 - Loren's exit, and Mrs. Samson and friends
Good to see that the app seems to work, now I'm waiting for Brett's bug reports :D
Not sure what to write because, as promising as Mrs Samson looks, the fact that is mom is there AND Cindy & Melissa are coming makes guesses etc difficult; tnx for taking care of the growth tag btw.
PS
If you end up following the advice to write on the wattpad, please please please write ALSO here!
Author's Response:
Haha, Loren wouldn't give him an app that didn't work at all - but there may be some bugs to work out :P
If I'm keeping you guessing then at least I'm not making it too predictable. XD
Date: September 20 2020 3:45 PM Title: Chapter 17 - Loren's exit, and Mrs. Samson and friends
Lots of juicy backstory here I love like the ShrinkProtect app, the shrinkee legislation or the stigma associated with willing shrinkees. Nice details with how the app only detects when someone is initially shrunk so far, but isn't going to do much once they are already shrunken. Plenty of room for fraud in that someone might develop a seperate app to block the safety check or something of that nature or hack it somehow.
With lots of drinks involved, looks like Brett is really in for quite a long day indeed. Seems to me that Cindy and maybe Melissa will be quite eager to make use of his tiny services while they can, based on how pricey it is. Hopefully he still gets to enjoy some brisket too, albeit at his tiny size :D
Author's Response:
Thank you!
Date: September 20 2020 11:59 AM Title: Chapter 17 - Loren's exit, and Mrs. Samson and friends
Loved the (mostly aftermath) scenes of Loren and Brett and his thoughts on having brought her to orgasm.
It's a good idea showing Loren's anxiety and worries over her feelings for Brett and vice versa, it's a realistic scenario I'd say that she is now taking a step back out of concern, be it for Brett himself (in her mind thinking it's probably best) or herself.
Be that as it may, I am hoping Brett and Loren wind up together in the end still, there is so much connections between them already, they just need to trust in one another, which is admittiedly hard for Loren given her backstory, but I'm hoping they do wind up together.
Now, speaking of Mrs Samson, some great dialogue and interaction there, I love her having some wide size 11's, and subgecting Brett to them.
It was kind of surreal reading his mother being in the room while he's lapping away at Katie's toe-jam buffet XD But the atmosphere is definitelty one fit for some mischief and teasing, mature women drinking and having a tiny guy in the midst, definitely potential for fun at their feet.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the feedback!
It is easy to write Nancy as I also had a very tumultuous relationship with my mother and if you accept the premise of the world so far, her logic, I can promise you, is very much realistic. I hope I'm making the motivation clear that she is not personally amused by the things that other people are doing with Brett and definitely has no attraction to her own son. But she acts under the belief that it's his fault and he should be refusing to continue with the program. She sees his performance as basically akin to prostitution with her own friends and colleagues. Now, if he chose to break his contract at this point, they'd have to get Brett out of Westwood, and Nancy would have to quit her job. So he's made it hard for her either way, and it makes her very upset with and unsympathetic to him.
Date: September 20 2020 10:27 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Sign-up sheet
M. Baron , why don't you use wattpad because it's better to make stories and if you make one , tell us your pseudo and all will be settled .
Author's Response:
Hi, I don't think I'll be moving to Wattpad. While I don't like old websites with UI bugs, I think sloppy security is worse. https://www.riskbasedsecurity.com/2020/07/23/personal-data-and-credentials-of-268-million-users-exposed-in-recent-wattpad-hack/
Date: September 19 2020 12:15 PM Title: Chapter 16 - Getting to know Loren Issakinen
Wow, that was a surprising chapter... not sure what to write here, so just a quick question: the summary says "Growh: Mega (501 ft. to 5279 ft.)" - is there really going to be something like that or is it just an oversight? (or "wait and see!" of course)
Author's Response:
Lol if you can't think of what to write, feel no obligation to comment XD
Alas there is neither an oversight nor a wait-and-see element to "growth". More like I was annoyed with the UI on this webpage and chose to be lazy and not to use a workaround to deal with it. When you are writing a story here and configuring categories, if you click any values in some of the selectboxes for configuring a story, as I did for "growth", you are compelled to select exactly one of those fields. "None" indicates the non-clicked state of the select, and is not a selectable option. So I clicked "Growth" accidentally and had no means of fixing it using the web interface itself. The workaround is to open up your browser's HTML development window, find the element in the page, and remove the "selected" attribute from the selected option, then save the story again. Seeing as how there seem to be a lot of high-quality stories which nonetheless have some minor miscategorizations, I didn't bother to do that until you mentioned it, because I figured nobody would care.
Date: September 18 2020 11:19 AM Title: Chapter 16 - Getting to know Loren Issakinen
Wow, that was really emotional and romantic , I hope them be girl and bot freind , thanks for your efforts , please more make it long
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review!
But I do need to wrap this story up at some point and move on to others. I'm thinking 25 chapters tops.
Date: September 18 2020 10:11 AM Title: Chapter 16 - Getting to know Loren Issakinen
I was so eager to read this when I saw it posted, but was busy earlier and just got the chance to sit down and read through it.
This is now my favorite chapter overall!
Sexy content wise you continued the trend of great imagery and descriptive scenes, the part with Brett in her shoe was great, as was him sucking on her toes full size.
The mouth content was also really well done, and evocative.
Non-sexual content wise, you've really gone a long way in developing their relationship. Or at the very least, establishing the framework for one here.
Her treatment of him while shrunk is fully understandable, and also links with her lacking of social and personal relationship norms. She hasn't been in a loving totally consensual relationship with someone before, she doesn't know the proper etiquette, and that's without adding in Shrinkee's.
For all her intellect and tech savy, human interaction is where she she finds herself grasping for answers, and the anxiety and genuine fear here when she potentially screws up what could be a first real relationship with someone who likes her and admires her not just physically but also intellectually, is shown so well and I was feeling her anxiety and fear bleed through.
I stated before I wanted to see this relationship grow, and how I could see Brett continue it beyond their 'shrinkee training' and schooling, and this only reinforces that.
I genuinly am rooting for these too, and excited and hoping to see where their relationship goes from here, not just physically but emotionally and personally.
I have my concerns what will happen to Brett at the hands of the other teachers, or the Amber character. But I am hoping that Loren will either save him, or support him after the potential trauma or negative interactions, being there for him when he needs her, and vice versa.
(phew) sorry for the long winded rant/review there, but hopefully it gets across just how much I like these two characters together.
And that's even touching on how excited I am to see the next chapter's content XD
Author's Response:
Hey, thanks! I really appreciate your review. I am glad that you feel that the backstory adds value and that you like the characterization. Loren's character is very close to my heart.
I can't reveal how the story will end, but you'd be correct in apprehending that there are at least some figures ahead who will be of the "unchecked merciless hedonist" sort, and maybe some real malevolence, but nothing bloody or fatal.
[Report This]Date: September 13 2020 5:12 AM Title: Chapter 15 - Loren Issakinen's Foot
Honestly, you're doing a very good job with this story, especially for it being your first one. You've created an interesting cast of characters, and that makes each mini character arc even more enjoyable. You've also been doing a pretty good job of slowly building up to the more action focused parts.
I really like how you've written Loren and I'm definitely looking forward to seeing how her arc goes.
Keep up the good work!
Author's Response:
I really appreciate the kind words!
I've been a fan of your Shrunk at College series for a few years now. Excellent stuff, I really love the world you've created. I would have reviewed in real time, but I used to merely lurk around here until I made an account to do this first story.
Date: September 13 2020 1:04 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Sign-up sheet
Really Enjoying this so far, I'm hoping things get more involved with Loren's weekend. Hopefully Brett can experience everything she has to offer, inside and out. (Hoping for AV or partial AV with Loren anyway)
Author's Response:
Thank you!
Date: September 12 2020 8:31 PM Title: Chapter 15 - Loren Issakinen's Foot
Wow, Loren is really spoiling Brett this chapter. I'm also surprised how honest he is being with her considering how it didn't go so well last time with Mrs. Gomez. Hopefully his honesty with her doesn't come back to bite him.. (as if).. I expect that Mrs. Samson will be a bit of a rude awakening after Loren's version of "detention."
To also respond to your response, I figured as much, but I wouldn't have it any other way. You put so much detail into your style I wouldn't want you to stifle it by writing something that you can't personally get behind. Also love the idea of places of business using the certification logic and technology, the possiblities are endless, either people willingly shrinking to offer special services or criminals used as a new form of amenity for businesses. My first thought was a salon/massage parlor, plenty of applications for them there. Could also do something regarding gig working shrinkees, signing up for temp jobs that don't know much about ahead of time. The certification is a great premise cause you are pretty much clearly stating that these are people who have little to no experience with shrinkees in the process of learning what to do to control them. Plenty of room for some miscommunications, mistakes or lack of oversight.... fortunately :D
When it comes down to it, I just love the idea of someone thinking they are gonna enjoy being a shrinkee but quickly realizing they are in too deep, but unable to back out.
Author's Response:
Thanks much! There's some growth in both Brett and Loren going on in these chapters. It may be pivotal to his future after all...
I love your ideas for extending the theme!
Date: September 12 2020 7:13 AM Title: Chapter 15 - Loren Issakinen's Foot
Wooh!
You did not dissapoint with this chapter, a great follow up to their first meeting.
I loved their interaction, and the scene leading up to the shrinking. I loved Loren's assessment of Brett and how she cut through all the bullshit and simply laid it all out in front of him.
I also like that she was open and encouraging of him to enjoy himself and 'release' I hope we get to see some intimate moments.
This also introduces a new form of dynamic which could be explored in later chapters (I know I said this with a few of the other teachers, but I feel it applies here too) where you've laid out a scenario and interactions which could have Brett back with her again.
I could see Brett visiting her on weekends of afterschool for more shrinking fun, or just to talk.
Loren is presented as not having many people she interacts with in her private/social life outside of her work and job.
And the visible change in her demeanor with Brett after their conversation, her more playful and gentle actions with him while shrunk, and her willingness to explore his desires (and on the flip side, his desire for her to explore hers)
Makes me feel that this relationship could grow into something more, and Loren could find a close friend (or little lover/tiny friend with benefits (or normal sized)
Hope this chunky review shows how much I really freaking loved this chapter, and am so excited as always to see more (but even more excited than normally XD)
Author's Response:
Thanks very much! I appreciate your review.
I think that you pretty much have Loren figured out, but she may have a few surprises - although your suggestions for a future relationship that they will have, I believe will not be disappointed.
Date: September 09 2020 3:20 PM Title: Chapter 14 - Alicia's Exit and Loren Issakinen's Interview
I have to say, this is probably my favorite size story. I love the characters and their unique perspectives on shrinkees. My most favorite parts are probably the "interlopers" as you put it in the Ms. Erenli chapters. Umaima is truly terrifying in that you really don't know what to expect next, and that great ending and how she mentions she wish she could show Brett off to her friends too. I love the tension between the responsibility the teachers feel to keep Brett unharmed, despite the "punishments" they are subjecting him too, relative to the brazen disregard the "interlopers" have when finding out he is a shrinkee (definitely looking forward to the Amber/final chapters). Especially how his teachers seem to offer him up for additional services to their friends, assuming that they will treat him equally carefully, despite them having none of the shrinkee training.
On a seperate note, I noticed you mentioned Brett's disinterest in male teachers and I totally understand if its just something you don't want to write, but do you think there will be any giants (teachers or otherwise) in this story or future stories or do you feel like your writing is gonna stictly involve F/m. I ask only because your writing style is great and there isn't much good M/m stuff out there. Also, do you think you might eventually do a prequel story that involves some of the unwilling deliquent shrinkees that came before Brett? Just an idea.
Author's Response:
Thanks for all the kind words! I am humbled! You are liking the exact parts that I hope I did well.
I mentioned this disinterest as part of characterization of both Brett and Ms. Issakinen; she is probing Brett to determine if he has a fetish for this. It's not a firm identification yet, but she is using these cues to assume that Brett is straight and is aroused by female teachers shrinking and doing stuff with him. That said, there is another reason I wrote him this way: I personally only want to write fetish content which turns me on, and I'm a straight male, so I don't intend to ever do M/* content, as I doubt I could do it very well without enthusiasm. I concur that there is a shortage of it. Sorry I can't be of much help there.
Prequels, sequels, and spin-offs for individual characters in this story are very possible. I think there might also be other stories that rely on the Certification logic and technology established in this story to build on what has already been established, but don't involve teachers or schools. For example, I like the idea of shrinking in churches, study groups, and workplaces, or even within families.
Date: September 08 2020 4:30 PM Title: Chapter 14 - Alicia's Exit and Loren Issakinen's Interview
Oh wow! Great chapter!
I must say I felt a little bummed out at Alicia's final thoughts on shrinking, as I hoped she would use it on her kids for what they did to Brett.
Anyways...
Loren Issakinen is a very... enticing figure to me. I love how analyzing and candid she is, and I loved that last moment of warmth with him. "... it is important to me that you feel happy with me." :3
Part of me hopes that Brett and Loren get... closer with one another. (Not in terms of different body parts, necessarily)
Author's Response:
Thanks!
Loren's way with language is a mixture of cold practical language and sincere, childlike warmth. I think she has got quite a story to tell.
Date: September 08 2020 12:44 PM Title: Chapter 14 - Alicia's Exit and Loren Issakinen's Interview
D'oh, somehow it sounded clear in my mind... ok, let me try to explain.
What I meant is that, based on my mental model of Alicia, I imagine she will be telling Nancy basically everything - everything that happened, every idea she had... everything; just imagine the last paragraph written in the 1st person, something like that. And btw, her reaction in this chapter to finding out what really happened was great!
Somehow I screwed up the other part as well, so let me try to rephrase.
What (I now believe) happened: he shrinks, she believes he's doing it on purpose (because she didn't really do her homework about how shrinking works), she's happy.
What I believed was happening: he shrinks, she thinks nothing of it because she knows he can shrink himself more if needed; that is what makes the misunderstanding possible and I was angry with myself because I didn't remember it was a possibility - turns out it wasn't, and re-reading you did say she "guessed that he could also shrink himself", shame on me!
To avoid further misunderstandings, I will only say that, as a programmer, I found this chapter interesting in an unexpected way :D
Author's Response:
Thanks for your comment!
Yes, I think you've got what I was intending for that scene. You're also right that Alicia doesn't generally keep secrets from Nancy, they are thick as thieves, but she understands that an actual desire for her friend's son might be crossing the line, and so she might spare the lurid details and just try to move past it. She does not want to spoil her friendship with Nancy or her family relationships. I'd consider this decision final unless circumstances changed quite a lot... (spin off maybe?)
BTW I'm also a software engineer, so hopefully I don't have any trouble making Loren believable ;) she is going to be the closest to my heart of everyone here.