Date: September 08 2011 1:17 PM Title: Chapter 5
Your writing is very generally descriptive. I wonder what Noeleen is going to tell him.
Date: September 08 2011 12:22 PM Title: Chapter 4
The time skips are annoying but you're genrally a good write, although I did notice some errors.
Date: September 08 2011 10:43 AM Title: Chapter 3
Parts of your story made me chuckle. I hope Noeleen can adress the situation thoguh...owards!
Date: November 26 2010 4:56 PM Title: Chapter 1
is a very romantic siory
[Report This]Date: August 20 2008 4:15 PM Title: Chapter 5
Not bad! But, you didn't explain the reason for his near-scream at the end of the previous chapter. Did Noeleen almost swallow him along with the water she swigged?
Author's Response: Hi CC, catching up with the reviews... Well the shout is of frustration, he was trying to get to a drink of water after the ordeal, and she just snatched it away from him! Nothing dramatic! ;-)
[Report This]Date: July 27 2008 4:26 PM Title: Chapter 4
I still think abduction by the Scandettes would have been dramatically hot! But, it's your Muse, dude.
You must write as she dictates.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading, CC! Well as it turned out my muse was in full agreement with you! ;-)
Date: July 27 2008 4:09 PM Title: Chapter 4
real nice keep up the good work... U're doing a great story....
Author's Response: thank you, Codename!
Date: July 26 2008 8:17 AM Title: Chapter 3
As usual it't a pleasure to read your stories keep up the good work man
Author's Response: thanks for the kind comment, codename! hopefully i'll get to write a few more still! ;-)
[Report This]Date: July 13 2008 10:04 PM Title: Chapter 3
This, too, needs an update in the most desperate way. And, as I said to Slipstream:
"Please, please, PLEASE get cracking!!!"
Author's Response: Well, just posted the update, CC ;-)
[Report This]Date: July 08 2008 12:23 AM Title: Chapter 3
I hope to see more. A very fun story. I like these stories with these two they are fun to read about and what kind of craze thing they get into. ^.^ Keep up the good work ^.^
Author's Response: Glad you like those, angeloflife!! They may not be the run-of-the mill kind of stories, but I enjoy exploring the relationship between those two , and hell, why not having fun for a change?
[Report This]Date: July 07 2008 6:25 PM Title: Chapter 1
Full of win. Also full of fun, horesshoes, ranbows, and good cheer. One of my favorites.
Author's Response: thank you so much for reading, DX! I will try to keep it interesting!
[Report This]Date: June 24 2008 4:10 PM Title: Chapter 1
Wow when will there be a third installment, really interested if more parts are comming... Keep up the good work it's a real nice story :-)
Author's Response: thanks for reading Codename!! I'm gonna try and speed up on this one!
[Report This]Date: April 26 2008 2:38 AM Title: Chapter 1
forgot the stars
Date: April 26 2008 2:37 AM Title: Chapter 2
This is quite good. An actual exploration of character as opposed to archetype and not afraid to treat this as legitimate writing. I confess I often group writing of this genre into one of two categories. If you choose to continue this please continue in this style that is more focused on character than on plot contrivances. Thanks.
Author's Response: Glad you like it, Galstaff! I 'm more interested in the games these two people are playing than the actual plot itself ;-) in many ways this a written day dream . I intend to keep going the way it's going, if only because it is fun and relaxing to write this stuff ;-)
[Report This]Date: April 17 2008 9:38 PM Title: Chapter 1
A very good start. I had fun reading it.
Author's Response: Thanks a mil for your reading, angeloflife! Stay tuned ;-)