Fun little erotic story. I like the idea and callousness and casualness of the females involved. I do think the dialogue could have been a bit more clever in how he is convinced to go with her and perhaps it would have been better if she had been coy a little longer before he realized he was a goner. Still, a good solid effort. Hope you write more.

Dear KaijuCarnival,

thank you for this amazing introduction into Jared and Melody's world! I really love your style of writing, your characterization of Jared and Melody is well written, but especially their relationship and their stands within this female-dominated parallel reality is described in a great way, it's really immersive and gives you an insight on both the characters, the world that surrounds them and the challenges Jared in particularhas to face. It's neither too little, nor too much description or interaction, it is a good mix. I am thrilled to see more of this story and learn more about how men are seen and handled in this world :).