Date: May 10 2013 10:11 PM Title: Chapter 1
A lot of people noted the similarities between this story and Homunclus, although I notice them, there is a huge contrast between the main protagonists, and I love the wide range of emotions from the characters in both stories.
Dave strikes me as more passive than Ray. The big difference being, Ray had some legal leverage in knowing his family couldn't just flat out murder or maim him without some consequence. Dave though, risked being murdered at any moment and no one would've known. And Carolyn had even less cards in her deck than Naomi.
Personally I liked Homunclus more because Ray had more attitude to him and made several attempts to fight back (figuratively speaking as he'd say) and even got the upper-hand for short durations. But, obviously Ray's situation as I noted gave him more leeway to act out.
Overall I also connected to Ray more since we got more insight into his life before living with the Daltons, his emotional attachment to his family at Spectrum, and felt his pain of him being legally forced to stay with the Daltonsm for life, as well as being GenetiTech's lab-rat.
The suspense though is what this story's strongest strength is in my eyes, Carolyn was prone to snapping at any moment, her overall delusional frame of mind that she's being a kind owner, Eddie's descent into madness, the betrayal aspects, of not only Linda, and Eddie, but Dave for picking Randy to die.
I also loved the sense of unity the group developed later on, especially of Mr. Nichols ( my favorite character) who came off as the most unlikeable at first, to being the most sensible and self-less, willing to stay behind because he thought he'd slow every down.
I couldn't stop reading in the final escape attempt and feel sad when everyone ( save for Dave and Julie) started to die one by one. Masterful work yet again.
Date: December 10 2012 11:34 PM Title: Chapter 1
Cayce, Great storie, man! You are a true Master, the comparisons you use and the style is just GREAT! I could read your tales over and over again!
I'm inspired by your style and structure, and the way that you form the basis, (It's like building a house) the foundation, I started this storie, and couldn't stop! LOL
You are so cool, please keep on writing, can't wait to read more of your stuff!
*wildcatman*
Date: February 07 2010 1:40 PM Title: Chapter 25
amazing story
Author's Response: Thanks!
Date: February 07 2010 1:08 PM Title: Chapter 1
Congratulations cayce, on another well written story. Kinda sucked how so many of them died. Would have been nice if denny survived. Great story, hope you continue to write soon. Look forward to another amazing story.
Author's Response: Hated to see Denny go too. He turned out to be my favorite character to write, and I kind of wish I'd kept him around for the inevitable sequel ;-) Thanks for reading, TM!
Date: February 03 2010 9:22 PM Title: Chapter 25
Always did like seeing your name pop up in the recent updates. Lengthy and interesting just like Homunculus. Not the happiest ending but well justified. I was hoping Chad would make it but I guess a party of three is one to many. :O
I can't wait to see your next work.
Author's Response: Me neither ;-)
Date: February 03 2010 8:21 PM Title: Chapter 25
Holy [EXPLETIVE DELETED] Hell, Cayce!
What a completely kickass ending! And to a completly mindblowing story!
That makes two for you, dude!
Now here's to holding one's breath for a third!
Bravo, Cayce! Just pure-dee bravo!
Author's Response: Glad you liked it! I left the fate of Dave, Julie, and Carolyn a bit ambiguous because I've got another story in mind that will feature them, as well as a number of characters from HOMUNCULUS. It's tentatively titled WONDERLAND, but that may change by the time I get around to posting it.
Date: February 02 2010 10:29 PM Title: Chapter 1
Teary Eyed ;.{
Beautiful work of art.
Author's Response: Thank you! I was starting to wonder if I'd ever get the [EXPLETIVE DELETED] thing finished...
Date: February 02 2010 11:33 AM Title: Chapter 25
One nitpick, though: a true acronym is a word _formed_ by initials (example: U.N.E.S.C.O.) Anything else is just a plain initialism. And any phonetic pronounciation of same is neologistic slang (example: "lurp;" derived from L.R.R.P---Long Range Reconnaisance Patrol).
Author's Response: Oops! I guess Dave wasn't aware of that when he was narrating the story ;-)
Date: February 02 2010 11:26 AM Title: Chapter 25
Dave is right. It sounds like they crawled out of the frying pan and into a pile of still-smoldering ashes!
This was a great story, never-the-less. And, I thank you for sharing it with us. :-)
Date: January 29 2010 12:02 AM Title: Chapter 24
No! Not Tubby!
Author's Response: I know! I miss that pedantic little bastard!
Date: January 27 2010 12:35 PM Title: Chapter 24
Was my favorite chapter thus far. Cant wait to see where you take it from here.
Loved the cliffhanger at the end. Well Done.
aaron
Date: January 26 2010 10:17 AM Title: Chapter 24
Aw, crap! Another sadistic cliff-hanger.
Date: January 13 2010 9:22 PM Title: Chapter 23
Wow tjhat was amazing I think that's the nest storie that was your best one yet .... But I had an idea for a storie but I'm not a writer so I can't write it there's not enouph love giantess stories out there and I have a feeling u could write a good one and as a request add alot of foot fetish haha LOL thanks a big fan cj
Date: January 06 2010 9:07 AM Title: Chapter 23
Day-um! I found myself cheering at the end! Excellent chapter, Cayce! Bravo!
Date: January 05 2010 2:52 PM Title: Chapter 23
Damn! Can't wait to read the next chapter: the great escape. Unfortunately the story does have to end sometime right? :(
Loving the quick updates, great chapter!
Date: January 01 2010 10:13 PM Title: Chapter 1
Once again, you truly bring the characters to life man, especially Carolyne. She was a raging goddess that didnt give a [EXPLETIVE DETAIL] about anything in the beginning of the chapter, and now shes a feeble woman who also has her own problems.
Great story man, appreciated the quick update compared to the others.
Author's Response: Yeah, I'm in the home stretch now. Not sure how many chapters are left, but they seem to be coming quicker and quicker these days ;-)
Date: December 07 2009 10:55 PM Title: Chapter 1
Goodness, where to even begin... In the past I've always waited until a story was completed before I submitted a comment. But to do that, I feel, would be doing you a great disservice Cayce.. Because what you've accomplished here is nothing short of amazing... Your story is both enjoyable and compelling to read. Heck, I'm sure I'm not alone when Is say that it's because of your writing that I've found myself constantly coming back to this website. So hey, maybe the wait is a little longer than we would all like. But it's WELL worth it in the end. :) So please don't give in to the preassure, take your time. And do so with confidence that there are a great many of us who deeply appreciate your efforts.
Author's Response: Thanks, Theodous! You know, this story has been read 66,000+ times and has received around 40 comments. I used to find that kind of demoralizing, but I realized I really owe it to those of you who take the time to comment to see this thing through. Thanks again for reading the darned thing and for letting me know =)
Date: December 07 2009 9:24 AM Title: Chapter 22
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Even though I half-expected the parental shrinkage, I didn't expect Cecile to go the way she did.
Masterful plot-twisting, dude!
Author's Response: Thanks! I knew I wouldn't surprise anyone with the shrinking of Carolyn's parents, so I had to throw *something* in to stir it up =)