Reviewer: Stylesrj Signed [Report This]
Date: February 16 2008 7:10 AM Title: Chapter 1

I found the scientific explanation for that neutrino whatchmacallit a bit redundant. Actually, by a bit, I mean a lot.

It's nice that you're explaining such "facts" but placing all your information at the end (and with no hints of a sequel) is not a good idea. You can just say your character got shrunk by a shrink ray and that was that.

Also, in other stories, you shouldn't try and explain that "theory" every single time you want to explain someone shrinking. Again, just go with mysterious shrink ray to save the hassle

Author's Response: Thank you for your review. The reason I go into so much detail about my neutrino dissimilation theory is because most of these stories were written for science fiction magazines, and my theory was my Ace in the hole, the reason they would be interested in publishing my story. I guess in future stories written strictly for the web I can just mention neutrino dissimilation without going into detail about the actual theory.