Reviews For A Morning Surprise
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Reviewer: kbDArt Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: July 12 2023 9:40 PM Title: Chapter 1

Well written and pretty good unaware story. Good character descriptions and a good backstory.

I think it would have been cool if the daughter had a secret crush on him and asked about him, with some conversation with her mother. Can you imagine him finding this out for the first time just as he's about to get eaten?

Reviewer: Sheograth Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 23 2019 1:40 PM Title: Chapter 1

I think this was a very good one-shot.

You had an enjoyable level of detail throughout the story, and I appreciated the small description of what her slippers were like, even though the main focus for the story was vore-centered.

I also enjoyed how severely her actions impacted Ryan, where even his voice could stop him in his tracks.

Nice job for a first story, and luck with your future writing projects!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much! Getting positive feedback inspires me to keep writing and try new things.

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